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    dots Submission Name: PRICILLIAdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this was about my daughter the drs said it could never happen and then we thpught shed never make it and now she is 2 and every day i fall more in love with her


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    dotsPRICILLIAdots
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    In you I see my mothers eyes.
    Brilliant pools of lavender.
    Your skin is bronzed like his.
    Sun kissed.
    You have my silly curls.
    Golden beams of light .
    You are my every fear.
    You are my every hope.
    Each day I think I can not love you more.
    Every day I do .
    My angel.
    There are times I am almost finished.
    Not one more needle
    Not one more sterile bed.
    Then I see you in the rearview.
    And know god wasnít wrong.
    It was his plan from start to finish .
    Its was for you all along .




    Submitted on 2005-08-03 12:04:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is beautiful, You express you emotion so well...
    The only thing I can pcik at is in the beginning when you break off to

    Sun Kissed.

    For some reason that stick out a little too much. The break For 'My angel." Is good because it goes with the same rhythm as the peom. But the first break you can either go with out or use different wording.

    But other wise, excellent peom and I'm sorry...
    I hope she pulls through completely.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful well written dedication piece to your daughter.
    A gift from God. How our children are so special to us. I enjoy reading pieces like this. Even though it has sadness it also have joy. Joy for you to be able to cherish your daughter. Never lose faith on what your belief is. In your heart and soul you feel the love only a mother can feel. I hope she continue to prove doctors wrong. My prayers are with her. Take care...wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      Great Job on this one...I don't have kids myself, but I can imagine it would be hell to hear someone tell you that your child may not make it..I would give my own life for any life that I created..I liked the emotion..Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sweet! you are writing about loving and caring for your child which makes me feel good, you know someone on here wrote about killing there child and that is a shame, thanks for a positive poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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