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    dots Submission Name: Don't blame me, Please!!dots
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    Author: dylanpoe
    ASL Info:    21 m la
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 322/332/56
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 897
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    Bytes: 1326



    Description:
       THIS IS A DEDICATION FOR ALL THE KIDS THAT ARE TAKING AWAY FROM THEIR PARENTS, EVERYDAY IN THIS "PERFECT" LITTLE WORLD. FOR THEIR PARENTS MISTAKES AND CRIMES, THEY HAVE TO PAY.... JUST A LITTLE PIECE, NOT AIMED FOR GOOD RHYME, NOT AIMED FOR GOOD GRAMMAR, ONLY AIMED TO TRY AND OPEN SOMEONE EYES, AS TO WHAT GOES ON


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    dotsDon't blame me, Please!!dots
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    Don't blame me for my mama
    Don't blame me for my father
    I didn't have sex at 13
    I didn't run from the police
    I was happy where I was at
    Playing with my toys, just being a kid

    Now I'm here in this hellhole
    Luckily there are people here,
    That care for me
    Being looked down upon
    By my own society, for just being born
    in a bad situation, nothing I could do

    I didn't use the drugs they used
    Wasn't my fault my parents thought
    I should be
    mentally, physically, and sexually abused
    Why blame me? Why not give me a chance?
    After all, I didnt pick my parents

    Left with my only clothes I owned
    To be with other kids, In my same shoes
    Huddled together, For what reason?
    People blaming us,
    For our parents mistakes.
    When you see the last name,
    Don't draw assumptions about me
    Remember, I was put in the situation
    I'm just playing the part given to me
    By the lord above, do me a favor
    Show me a little more love

    INSPIRED BY RAVENWOLF68'S "MY CHILDREN"
    without her words and occupation,
    this would probablly not have been written




    Submitted on 2005-08-03 20:03:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, that was a great story of triumph! I applaud you for putting your feelings out there for everyone to explore. It's great to read when someone tells the truth about something. Fortunately, I don't relate to this life but I'm sorry you had to go through so much pain hun... You have what seems to be a good life now so keep on Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I haven't read a good, true and serious writing like this in I don't know how long. Everything in it is so true. It's sad to think that in our society this is so true, doesn't matter who you are your known for what your parents have done in the past. The reason kids get put where they are, where they might not be better off sometimes all because there parents made mistakes. They didn't choose there life style but yet people look down upon them for it. Some make the best of it, as much as they can, try to give themselves things that there parents didn't have so they don't end up like them. Try to get out of the crappy situation that someone else has chosen for them. I love this. It's very true and very heart felt. I was lucky enough to not have parents like this but feel bad for those who do. I do however know how getting blamed for stuff feels like. My mother wasn't really around, well she was but she was always drunk and it was a lose-lose situation, luckily I played the cards I was delt just right and got out. I love this. I look forward to reading more of your stuff. Sorry this is so long.
    ~manda
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ben,
    You bring tears to my eyes...You so capture the essence of all the children I work with. This piece touches me as did your other. You inspire me to keep on doing what I do - the days lately I have questioned why I am there when management pisses me off to the point of almost walking out and I see your words and stay...
    Thank you - Ben - this is beautiful
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I wonder if these children feel as though they are being punished for their parents mistakes...does society think so too? what a shame if that is so. How could anyone blame innocence? *deep sigh*
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      this was amazing. using the childs perspective was a wise choice.
    Innocence is a very powerful thing to use in poetry and just the use of the word "momma" make it hit much harder then if you were to go and write the poem from an outsiders point of view.
    keep it up

    much love,
    kris
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this sadly to say and unfortunately is the parents fault...whether it be because of a lack of wanting to use birth control, or because of a negligence to use it to try and "trap" someone. People know who and how they are and it just seems like most of the parents of these children just neglected the fact that they knew they would suck as parents, yet still let it happen. Definately the parents fault...the "supposed" adult. Children having children...never works...and its not just an age thing...some people are too much of a child into their 50's, ya know? But, I suppose they always have an excuse as to why they are bad parents, an addiction or something like that. Heck, if their life was so hard growing up, why would they make it like that on their kid? Anyway, I am just rambling and venting now...Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I can hear everything that you're saying, may not understand it firsthand, but I hear it. The one thing so many people seem to forget, is the fact that the children don't ask to be born. It wasn't their choice to be here. It's sad when they have to pay the heftiest price for things. There are some poeple I have to wonder how the hell they have the right to reproduce...but there's nothing I can do about it. I'm a young mother of 2 and they are my universe, I can't imagine causing my child this kind of pain.
    You are an amazing writer and I thoroughly appreciate your writing and have a ton of respect for you and your bro for keeping it real-always! Thank you for sharing-I hope it makes a difference!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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