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    dots Submission Name: CITY MYTHdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       again somin diffrent not my usauly morbid stuff any please please let me know whaty you think

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    dots CITY MYTHdots

    Eyes like shattered twilight.
    Mane of flowing white.
    I have imagined him drinking from a silent stream .
    Letting his hair dance gently on the water.
    Aimlessly gazing at his reflection.
    Remembering times long ago and far away.
    But here .
    Here in A city of gunshots and smog.
    Why not some forgotten jungle.
    An empty island somewhere.
    Hes just as brilliant though enveloped in moonlight.

    Submitted on 2005-08-03 20:06:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i feel you on that wasted talent.stuff like that
    i hope this is what uer poem is about, otherwise i feel really stupid. wait to late.. j/k hey are you still with me? okay well they dont have to waste away in the smog anymore. because they can come to eliteskills.com
    great write
    peace kristian
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay this is great work. you seem to be describing a lion and that this is a new jungle he has arrived in something modern and yet he still is the King and will survive no matter his ambience and it is probably a metaphor for how people now-a-days do not think about how they destroy creatures home and create their own.

    Semper Fidelis,
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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