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    dots Submission Name: Fuck the Navydots
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    Author: frozenconscienc
    ASL Info:    17/f/md
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 91/55/13
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    Description:
       My father wrote this before he died. It's short, I know. He had a horrible childhood and ran away to join the navy at 16...apparently that wasn't good for him either.


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    dotsFuck the Navydots
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    I've f*cked in England
    I've f*cked in Spain
    I've f*cked up and down
    The coast of Maine

    I'll never be happy
    I'll never be free
    Until I've f*cked the navy
    Like it has me.




    Submitted on 2005-08-03 21:15:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Melissa, your dad is awesome. I wish I knew him:OP

    Sorry I havent much to say on this piece, but it made me smile and its one of my favourite reads so far:O)

    Ahaha, sounds like some morbid gravestone thing:O?

    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE. I LOVE IT. Navy stands for Never Again Volunteer Yourself, you know. I always wanted to get a tattoo on the outside of my hand that said [censored] army, so if i ever got drafted and they made me do a salute it would be all... Right, I'd probably be shot. But still. This made me laugh. Good read. -rue
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the little limerick, its something you can remember and take with you. haha.
    I agree with the morbid gravestone thing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by trenthippie | [ Reply to This ]
      If it were my dad who wrote this I would be tempted to put it on his tombstone for all to see...but then we all know that is NOT APPROPRIATE!...so, what I would probably then do is type it up real nice, have it plastisized somehow (to weatherproof it) and rest it up against his stone...He wrote it for a reason and now that he can't say it himself, you could give it a voice for him - you know, in his memory or whatever. By the way, I did want to say I'm sorry you had to lose your dad at such a young age, life is sometimes very unfair.
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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