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    Author: fallenpopcorn10
    ASL Info:    18/vagina/california
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 78/111/38
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I know it sucks...it's kinda old...I put it up cus I haven't posted one in a while...well just say what you think :-/


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    He is my savior
    My point in life
    The one I can trust
    And tell all my secrets
    Knowing it wont be remembered
    Love in him
    The point of belief
    Honesty and trust
    I can always run to him
    No matter what
    He will always listen
    No matter how tired he is
    How boring it is
    How long it is
    How stupid it is
    He will always listen
    And forgive me
    He is my savior
    My savior is God




    Submitted on 2005-08-03 22:19:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww this is enough to make a beast like me warm. that is great keep up that faith.

    it nice to be open about what you believe. and I find even though I don’t strive with the old man (sorry I call him that) I find that many of his followers have such beautiful feelings for him.

    L1-3 savior strikes me as a Christian belief. the point I take as a central point though always can be the beginning and the end. I always love that saying from point A to B thinking it should be point A to C with B being the journey. “can” the emphasized word for me here for many have broken that trust I imagine.
    L4 yeah I can dig that he is there always the friendly ear. cool thing is, your secret wont be betrayed. how much can you say that for your fellow person?
    L5 knowing it wont be remembered that is a more complex statement there. simply it would be remembered how ever if it something that requires forgiveness then yes I could imagine God throwing those past blunders into the sea of forgetfulness.
    L6 “love in him” seems to me to be grammatically incorrect but I could be wrong.
    L7 the point again but in this verse the difference being “of belief” I do like that when repeaters are given little differences that is good.
    L8-11 I suppose that would make it feel like you can always go to God for that honesty and trust is always there, regardless of the situation. he will be there to listen that is comforting.
    L12-15 hahaha well I don’t think God would get tired but I get what you are driving at “weary of” I imagine nothing could bore him or just in conversation too long or stupid.
    L16 repeat of 11
    L17 this is a little though. know I don’t know if you are one for the bible but the forgiveness part I have always had a problem with. for it is written that “any man who comes forward and repents of his sin so shall he be forgiven” (now I suppose when the good book says “he” or “man” it is a general thing encompassing all mankind which would include ladies, I suppose) yet for it is also written that “anyone who says anything against the Holy Spirit it shall not be forgiven in this world or the next” I see that as a paradox and a rather uncomfortable one. I have set out to ask many about that paradox and got a host of defensive answers. which in turn I have learned they don’t really have a definitive answer for that. I am sorry though I shouldn't bring all that up here you are showing your feelings and I am here bringing up my God drama.
    L18-19 its nice to see you have that faith hope for you it is increased a hundred fold and carry you through the darkest of these times.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was cool.. and so very true :) don't be sorry for sharing in your faith... don't forget He is our Rock in time of need.. never to be washed away like sand..

    Penny
    | Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]


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