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Author:	Akili
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Words:	212

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Just another thing I've written. Again, please tell me if anything is wrong as I don't have a spell check on here and my spelling sucks.

Heros have appeared dots

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Heros have appeared
just to save you and me.
Made of steel and blood,
would you ever see Batman cry?

Does the Flash ever lose sleep at night,
recalling past events so long ago?
Will they ever give up and cry
or just move slowly on.

Heros are brave
in the face of death it's self.
No one to love
so that it would be easy upon them.

Would Superman ever bend
let his lust take over for just one night
in which he could have it all.
Would he even need to get drunk?

Could they ever allow anyone to get close
or are they doomed to wonder the land all alone?
Giving smiles to so many
when one has hardly graced their face.

Could Spiderman get a real job,
if he didn't have to rush off.
saving the world gives you no time for dates.

A man made of steel and little bugs
he could never have a life after that.
What can you do
when only the villains know all about you?

What if the world had no heros,
to save you and me?
Would we be able to hold our heads up high
or would we be here at all?

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  A very curious and highly intriguing poem! The truth is that this poem IS about OURSELVES! There are no "super" heros, so to make the world--at least partially--livable, we all should/must do things that, at least to us, seem superhuman....what is so wonderful about this poem is that you never come right out and say this, but anyone reading MUST think of it even if they do not agree...a brilliant conception ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
| Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  woot woot for this peice. It has an interesting way of attaching incredible characters with credible feelings, emotions, and vices. Being a comic book nerd myself, I saw several references in here that have actually happened in the comic books, so I can answer your questions :P...

great peice. it's very real in a nabokov-y way.

Wishing for more
~Brian
| Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  I really dont have much to say about this other than that I like the way your mind thinks, I envy you in this respect. Your mind certainly does not appear to be lazy :)

I'm not sure but i think it might be meant to be spelled "heroes", unless you spell it differently in America.

well done
| Posted on 2006-02-12 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  My favorite hero is my father to me he is the man of steel. I know without him I would not be able to stand with my head high. Thanks for writing this poem it reminds me of how important having him here in my life. I was taking him for granted. But u made a great point without those people that stand up for u and make you smile each day where would we be; probably full of grief and cloaked in depression. You made your words flow quite nice some parts were a little off for me but overall it made its point and thats what i think all poems are supposed to do. I was reading and thinking about if it should rhyme, maybe it would have had that extra push it needs to be that greatt poem you were searching for to be your centerpiece. Consider revising alright. I am not calling this a bad write because it isn't. It is well written with a nice point now make it a great write.
Could they ever allow anyone to get close
or are they doomed to wonder the land all alone?
Giving smiles to so many
when one has hardly graced their face.
More verses like that one could do this poem the justice it deserves.
| Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh, I loved this poem soooo much. It really shows how heros (spiderman,flash and batman) have different lives where they all have to hide something. There identity , and they just cant live and have a real life. We all need a hero to protect us. Awesome poem
inkpen
| Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
  Aww, Akili I love you so much. You are my hero. The fact that people don't get what you are really trying to say makes me sad. There is good in the world Honey, people just won't open their eyes to see it. If I could just once show you how much good you do, I would, because Darlin' you do a lot. You are caring, even when you shouldn't be, you can make me smile on my worst of days, your laugh brightens a room, and you have this fun loving attitude with a hint of devil in it that just makes you freakin' adorable!

If Batman were to cry where would his tears fall? Would he let the world see them or keep them hidden? Would the world accept him if he did shed a tear in their sight, or would they turn their backs, and act as if he had never once done good by them?

People turn a blind eye, because they don't want to see the fact that the same thing is happening to them. No one wants to live with what they have, EVERYONE wants someone else to take care of their hardships, but NO ONE is willing to be that person to pick of the pieces of someone elses shattered life. It may hurt, but you just gotta get back up and go.

I love you Akilli!

Keep your smile, I'll see you on Tues.

Bon
| Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  in the fifth verse u said wonder when the word should have been wander. Other than that its great and i agree with your feelings.
| Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  No one to love
so that it would be easy upon them.

this could have been described a little better, than stated...

Would Superman ever bend
let his lust take over for just one night
in which he could have it all.
Would he even need to get drunk?

that is why they are on tv... not an avid fan of any superheros, so really wont go into detail, but this piece had some emotion but it was lackluster, liven it up, maybe add a few metaphors in, but the fact of comparing tv personas to real life is rather amusing, but yet senseless... so this was a fun piece for you to write...
| Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by daniel05 | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought that it was boring. I wouldn't put it as a "Featured Writing". You have better ones! I like the concept, but I don't like the way it flows.
Liz Renee
| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Liz_Renee | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not over-fond of commenting, but I like this one. Very much so *points to her favorites list*
I'm not entirely sure that I understood it entirely, but the gist of it made it's way through my thick skull.
Can you imagine actually being a superhero? It would suck after a while, I think...
It might still be worth it, though, for the cool powers.
^.^

~Birdie~
| Posted on 2006-05-03 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]

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