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    dots Submission Name: Servicedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 831
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    Description:
       Started this one & I seem to be having one of those Mondays that's lasted all month long (perhpas weird lunar pulls????) Anyhoo, writing hasn't been easy as of late & I pray for my focus to return. Hopefully, I can finish this one....Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsServicedots
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    Teach me how to fish
    my Lord;
    A servant of
    His goals,
    A saviour of
    His souls;
    A line of Love
    cast out
    A life-long service
    no doubt...




    Submitted on 2004-04-13 16:53:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm, alrighty, this is deffinatly one that can be interpretated in a variety of ways, and that is one of my favorite things about art. i know which way seems evident, and perhaps what you were trying to convey, or maybe that's my personal allusion.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      P.S....I do really like the line cast out for love part.....this changes the whole feel to the piece and makes it different.
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      cool structuring, and also u have some good rhyming. i liked the fourth last and the third last lines, they changed the look of the whole poem!!

    but the thing i did not understand was that how was this poem a love poem??? plz enlighten me!!!

    Zu
    | Posted on 2004-05-01 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      Well this is very nice and seems like one of those inspirational messages people print on bookmarks. Which means it is not too terribly original in thoughts....Christ as the fisher of men....But, dont get me wrong. There is always room for one more as nice as this one!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]


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