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    dots Submission Name: Karma, Kiss Minedots
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    Author: dreamweaver
    ASL Info:    28/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 1022/443/42
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
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    Description:
       I just needed to get my anger out a bit.
    I'm starting to believe that I must omit bad karma no matter what I do...here it is!

    As I stated, it's a rant not exactly anywhere near poetic in nature or organized for that matter

    Anyone who understands how I feel...please feel free to drop a line


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    dotsKarma, Kiss Minedots
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    Here I sit
    words of love and happiness gladly failing me.
    Rock bottom is ten feet above my head,
    I've had enough.
    What goes around comes around,
    I ask
    When the hell have I bit someone in the ass?

    I've reached out to those in need when I myself had nothing left
    Praised God even after he took those that I held close to my heart
    Held the hand of the strongest woman I've ever known as she took her last breath
    Live happily paycheck to paycheck so that I can raise my children...

    What have I gotten in return?

    Nobody's there when the days are dark
    when things look bleek,
    when the shelter of someone's arms is all that I seek.

    It's become a game of catch me if you can
    but be careful cause it's always slippery when it's wet.
    I've swallowed my pride a million times to save the feelings of someone else
    And now I think I've had enough.

    Karma....you can kiss my ass!




    Submitted on 2005-08-04 09:43:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write My Friend is vert angry
    That does not mean it isnt good
    I know you got a lot of the anger out you were holding inside writing this
    Since this was written Awhile ago
    I certainlly do help the positive has filled in the spot left by the negative
    Great Job with this one
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      u give it a finger and I am trying to make peace with mine!!I started writing to clear my mind too.. I hope this helped.. and I am sorry to hear you are going through so much...
    hope everything works out
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      Sheush.. (I don't know what it means...I see it as an expression. :) ). I liked this a lot. Everyone else has pretty much said what I would say, so I'll leave it at that. One question though. Where in Wisconsin? I just moved from northern Wisconsin last year...just thought that was interesting. I live in Arkansas with my baby girl and finace now. Went through a crappy divorce....alone for a while and it sucked...when all we can do is be nice, helpful and give ourselves...life still bites us in the ass. Okay...I didn't leave it alone. Go figure. :) lol.
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by .:eVe:. | [ Reply to This ]
      this is exactly how i feel most days! i know exactly what you mean...

    when one sits back and just waits for the fairness to kick in...

    very nicely stated, you put words to my mood, thanks!

    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it. Absolutely love it. I couldn't critique this piece not one bit. All I can say is you put so much feeling into this, because I can FEEL the emotions busting from the seams in this one.

    Very well written. And I'll tell you hun, stay strong, because it will all flourish, and life will give you smiles. I'm not sure what you believe in, but I truly believe god blesses us in his own time. And unfortunately, he dosen't have an appt. book to let you know when that time will be.

    We walk by faith, not by sight.

    Stay strong hun...you'll get through whatever it is you're facing. And if you ever need an ear..you can vent to me :) Write me a book..I'll read it.

    *big big hugs a plenty*
    Avry
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      Good one. Karma needs a kick in the ass, cause that's all it seems to be doing for anyone these days. This is really great. I love the lines about living paycheck to paycheck, and holding the hand of the strongest woman you've ever known while she was dying...It's personal details like this that keep this from being a stereotypical angry rant. This was great! Thanks for commenting on my stuff, too!
    | Posted on 2005-09-12 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been meaning to read this Candi, and I'm glad I left it till today, cos I could do with a lift.

    Your poem has reminded me of my own beliefs, yes, I do believe in some things, and the biggest one of all is karma. Unashamedly.

    I live my life by it, sometimes embarrassingly so, but like everybody, I need to be reminded from time to time.

    Your karma will come. Count on it, live by it.

    Be Happy. thanks

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel the pain and i feel the ending, emotions running wild in this, but they need to be put together and orgarnized, to get the anger a little more channeled.. but yeah i just dont understand karma, guess its a person obviously but i did like the last line very good way to sum it up
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      "Rock bottom is ten feet above my head,
    I've had enough.
    What goes around comes around,
    I ask
    When the hell have I bit someone in the ass?"

    I can so relate - many is the day when I sit actually writing a list of everything I have ever done that could have generated the sh*t coming down on me and it never equals out.
    Karma is an A**hole on some days!
    I like this very much
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn straight!
    There are definitely times it seems the universe has it in for us. We do the best we can, be good people, don't purposely hurt anyone, and yet we get bit in the butt regularly.
    Great write dear. The frustration and anger came across very well. Hope your situation gets better for you.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh...Candi! So glad you are getting this stuff out through your writing, well maybe some of this stuff anyway. I hear ya on this I really do! You just take it and take it until you just cant take it no more and then you just explode and sh*t flies everywhere! You are not alone in these feelings believe me! I can relate to mostly everything you said and feel...except for the children cause I dont have any. But as far as being a good person and always doing the right thing and being good to people and supportive and strong and seeing death and sorrow and so on and on...you could just go on forever ya know! It never equals out! The sh*t just keeps piling and piling and you never seem to get out from the giant pile of life! And I have questioned my faith many a time for taking people from me who were dear, some young and some old. I never got any answers for countless questions that I asked of God and witnessed tragedy to those I love. I try to treat people with respect and as I want to be treated only to get hurt and lied to and betrayed. And then when I have felt like I hit rock bottom like 10 feet ago, the ground falls in beneath me and I drop another 10 feet! Believe me, I hear ya my friend! I am walking right next to you and I'll even hold your hand if ya like! We could tip a few cold ones and laugh that is for sure! Yeah, karma can kiss my ass too! Great writing Candi! I am here with you! Feel better! Here...have another smile...

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I sure understand these feelings. I'm jobless and wondering what's in my future and what has led me to this place in my life. Now lets deal with the karma thing. Don't let Lennon convince you that instant karma exist. If you are really a student of the belief you understand that this life is a product of past lives and not what you've done this time around. The philosophy of karma is based on reincarnation and one must perform selflessness and compassion now with the belief that it will affect their lives to come. But don't let me distract from this poem which is well written and conyeys your emotions beautifully and is very well done. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Being a defiant soul myself I can really identify with this poem. I have shaken my fist at the heavens many a time cursing my fate. Or wondering what I did to deserve such a thing. Which is worse? Knowing that Karma is real or knowing that no such thing exists. I think that on the whole knowing we have no control at all over the crap that happens to us is worse. So I'll believe in Karma for now. Still, it can kiss my ass too. :)

    A heartfelt poem with a killer punchline and a clever title. Well done!
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG, Did I write this? I know exactly how you feel. So many times. I must admit though, as profound as it is, many times I just had to laugh at the way you worded it. This is great. I had to read this because of the title, couldnt have done better myself. Bravo to you, girl.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      BRAVO! Dont we all feel like this sometimes? I know a lot of people that could have written this, I probably could have too. I think thats why its hard to trust...cuz that Karma crap, ya know? Yeah, very friggin good rant. Giving all and then getting nothing in return is a beeatch. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Candi you are a tough spirit. i believe in you and know that you can kick ole karma right in her silly little ass. its time like these I tend to say "awww f**k it" and try to stand right through it. course i fold from time to time telliing god to just end it. its a good thing we have friends there to pick us up when we are at our weakest. ill be strong again like you maybe not as strong as you are but I admire your strength and your convictions. great piece Candi never lose your strength, courage and most of all hope.
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. yeah, I have felt this way, especially back when my kids were younger and I was alone. then I found someone and got married but that's another story. this was a pretty mild rant considering and I like the way you laid it out. Sometimes you try to do everything that's right and the world just falls apart around you and no one is there to pick you up. I guess that's when you pick yourself up and write something like this. I hope things get better for you and I know they will. karma or no karma! it can't last forever.

    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Candi, Wow! your hurt and frustration is raw and deep. Sometimes the only thing you can do is attempt to shake yourself out of the negative expectations that can become self fulfilling. I know how difficult this is as I have been there too.

    I hope things change for you and you find some happiness real soon! :)

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Candi, I had forgot to read this when you tolf me of it. I accidently deleted all messages and could not remeber who sent what! lol. If you had not of commented on Mental Meltdown, I still will be in the dark about this poem. I love the pure honesty you showed hear. And I've been where you were coming from. I swear sometimes if I didn't have bad luck, I wouldn't have any luck at all! lol. I love the awareness you reached that you need to grow a tough skin and bite back! lol. I also love the rawness of the pain you flet. I can remember saying those exact words at times, about never doing wrong, or hurting a soul, but getting hurt all the time. I thought you stole a page from my diary! lol. I hope the release of that anger helped you some. And that insipired you to continue to be a fighter. I love this rant! This ia a fav.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      The temptation to be critical or overly sympathetic upon reading this piece must be averted. I cannot imagine a more frustrated place than where you were writing from.

    Some might think God would be angry at your reproach. Others could be backing away in fear of a lightning strike at any moment. But I am convinced neither scenario is true.

    In fact, I believe God heard every word of it. Your complaint did not fall on deaf ears. Everything has a purpose and a reason for occurring. The lie of Karma places the "good" or the "bad" on the individual. While we do sometimes cause our own grief, some things are beyond our interference and rest squarely on God's lap.

    Just ask Job. Job complained too you know. In the end, though, Job submitted to God and was restored and blessed.

    You have taken your case to the right authority.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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