hmm this started off great but it seemed to lose its flow eventually. i think this was a bit long too. maybe u could shorten it a bit. im not quite sure on how u could do it cuz im not good at thinking of ideas right on the spot to help people. but maybe if u sat down and looked over it and took out some parts it would be good. and i can relate to this also. sometimes i pray when i need help with something. but i cant just do it i believe u sometimes have to face things or figure things out for yourself. but anyways just fix it upa bit and it will be good.
I was once with a group of very religious people, who thought they controlled the world. Just because they went to church on Sunday they were better then me. And because they went to church God protected them, or something, because they didnt wear seat belts, and threw no caution to the wind. I dont go to church, but I do believe in God, so dont get me wrong, God is not some scam in my eyes, but moreso something to believe in. Everyone has to have a faith somewhere.
"I wish I could help you see [The figment of your imagination]"
"You close your eyes to the world [And turn your cross]"
(you already said get down on your knees, so that just kinda keeps the flow a bit better and makes the reader feel like they havent expeienced a deja vu moment)
"I made you look at me [A smile that said everything'll be alright"
(using I too much)
First two lines= I like the repitition type thing:O)
"I only [tried] to save you But you were too blinded to see"
COMPLETE kick-arse ending. ^All that up there is just for flow and to avoid too much repitition of similar things. Its a bit terse, but I think you'll get what I mean.
Overall, I really really liked this. I do believe in God, but I also believe in some of the things you said. Some people just need a reality check, I guess.