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    dots Submission Name: Let You Go (Done)dots
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    Author: manderz_1207
    ASL Info:    15/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95/109/38
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1008



    Description:
       I posted this before but now it's finished. I know that there's some "cuz" in there and that's how I want it to sound. Just a little FYI! Other wise they are lyrics, I do have music picked out for them. Let me know what you think.
    Thanks


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    dotsLet You Go (Done)dots
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    Verse 1-

    I saw you standing by her,
    it brought a tear to my eye.
    I couldn't help but see you there,
    just walking on by.

    You didn't even notice me,
    I didn't even get a hi.
    You looked like you were into her,
    and you passed me on by.

    Chorus-

    Yet I can't seem to let you go.
    Cuz everytime your here with me,
    my heart just says...
    No, that I can't seem to let you go.
    Still ya move on by, every single time.

    Verse 2-

    Today is just another day,
    that I can't have you in my life.
    Cuz everytime I look at you
    I know that you don't want me by your side.

    I can't stand to feel this pain you bring,
    the pain you've caused my life.
    And I won't stay and look at you,
    while she's standing by your side.

    Repeat Chorus





    Submitted on 2005-08-04 13:53:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this piece. I feel sooo related to it because a thing almost exactly like the one you described just happen to me. I know, it's really hard to let go, specially when he has moved on and is with someone else, i know how it feels, heartbreaking because by just remembering it i can still feel it, but you just have to be get stronger and fight against your pain. Every dissapointment gives you strength!
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
      It would be good to hear the music that goes along with these lyrics. All in all it's not too bad my dear! I think I get a little lost in the chorus, but that may just be me. Either way, it's not too bad like I said. This is something that the majority of people can relate to, unfortunately. It is so very hard when you're forced to let go when you don't really want to...yet deep inside you know that you have to. This feeling sucks, but you captured your hurt in a real way. Good job!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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