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    dots Submission Name: The World of Insanitydots
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    Author: Imaginth
    Elite Ratio:    5.18 - 43/50/19
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I have never done anything like this type of poem so tell me what yo think! Anything will be appreciated, good or bad!


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    dotsThe World of Insanitydots
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    Seeing isn't always believing,
    Can you see the insanity that brings couples together?
    What love brings two people together by having your dogs tie you up next to your future lover,
    Can you see the insanity that tells you to smile during a funeral?
    The one you love is gone, you smile when your mourning at the same time knowing they will be happy,
    Can you see the insanity that tells you to wear white after Labor Day?
    The fashion world would shudder at you in your white jacket while you walk down the runway,
    Can you see the insanity that tells you to ride the biggest, fastest rollar coaster in the world?
    Amusment parks with huge lines and no one in the rollar coaster when you decide to ride,
    Can you see the insanity that tells you to ride a bucking bronco without any protection?
    Rodeo staduim packed to the brim to see you get tossed around on the fiercest bull,
    Seeing really isn't believing.




    Submitted on 2005-08-04 14:29:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked your poem, it is very different, and brings up interesting points about the world.
    ~~Mykquillion
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
      personally I dont care for open poetry but I like this oddly enough this was good
    I like rhymthmic devices
    now I take it this is a personal experiance
    good job
    sounds painful I will put my junk tell me what you think
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by wolfman36x | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this
    This write is very creative and even more so coming from such a young mind
    It really made me think
    Iwill be looking for more of your writes
    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way you reapeted "Can you see the insanity" part.

    "Can you see the insanity that brings couples together?
    What love brings two people together by having your dogs tie you up next to your future lover,"

    this line seriously made me go "aww." such a thoughtful poem..
    being differnt for someone you love.
    doing everything that no one would do just to make the person you love happy.

    "Can you see the insanity that tells you to smile during a funeral?
    The one you love is gone, you smile when your mourning at the same time knowing they will be happy,"

    smiling in a funeral is very shocking.
    i mean, when you love somebody you're suppose to be all sad and disappointed right?
    but when you smile...just so he would also feel happy is a very unique picture.

    i've never read anything like this...i might also add this to my fave list.
    very well written...i'm glad you decided to try something new.

    since your 14 and i am too...maybe we can check each other's poems out!

    -fearless
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      omg 14! wow! So anyhow, the poem...has gotten some good phrases and expressions, but unlike the person before me commented i don't really like the repeatition of the can you see the insanity. I'm hoping there's some subtle way to convey it is the work of insanity, rather than repeating it. It may be just me. My own paranoia and insanity. :P I'll leave the matter to you. good luck.
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ms. DejFruit | [ Reply to This ]


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