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    dots Submission Name: Back to Schooldots
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    Author: DeepsLighter
    ASL Info:    17/f/Brazil
    Elite Ratio:    7.89 - 97/62/14
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       helloes
    i just wanted to get one thing straight: I DO NOT HATE SCHOOL!! this poem is my thoughts of what my Advanced Placement{AP} Biology classes will be like cuz of my teacher's boring voice..hehe..school is cool, i literally live there cuz i spend like 8 hours 1/2 in there so i dont hate it...

    and what abt the title? i just put it Back to School, but anyone hv anyother ideas?
    thank u


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    You sit there...
    You look around...
    All those faces that you haven't seen
    for the past six weeks are there.

    You look up,
    there's the teacher
    talking and talking...
    Doesn't he ever stop?

    His voice-monotonous,
    what can you do to make it stop?
    "Perhaps i should throw a book at his face,"
    You think to yourself.

    You sit there,
    You look around,
    there's the girl next to you...
    She looks like she's about to fall asleep.

    You look up,
    there's the teacher.
    He's still talking,
    going on about life-monotonous.

    "Perhaps i should walk out."




    Submitted on 2005-08-04 14:36:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm.. doesn't sound too serious. Is it meant to be? It's probably not so.. hmm. It doesn't flow too well, try to throw in some rhymes or perhaps some better words. Pretty humorous.
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      hee hee. If I threw a book on my physics teacher, it would dissolve because of his smell. Unless it hit his mouth, it would go right in =P. It's true, he has a big mouth, that's how he goes on and on and on... if i went on with this "on"ing then this would be the longest comment on the site.
    But this was funny and cool. Good Job



    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      haha this was semi-ammusing for me....I know what you mean but in general I do hate school JUST becuz this whole year I've only learned three things, two of them just techinical terms for things....and it just feels like a waste of time, plus if WE (as the students) are going to show up, are required to show up, are DOING the work then WE should get paid for it. that and if the teachers have 7 hours a day, 35 a week to teach us then they should get their lessons done IN class. but ok enuff ranting lol, back to your poem, I liked it alot and mainly for the fact that it's easy to relate to and it's truthful...."Perhaps I should throw a book at his face" lol I got a great picture in my head there.
    --nice write,
    ~peace~
    ::silent::
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWWW,
    It's that time again! "Back to School", well it is right on time! I see how you feel about starting again. School might be boring but, very important. I like the way you express with thought. "Perhaps I should throw a book at his face"...um,um,um...(Good thing it was just a thought) Your flow show a meaning.lol! Anyway, I liked it and I hope you get a better outlook about school. You take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm really excited when school starts..only because my summer is more boring than it can be compare to my school days..
    i mean, i actually have goalsto do and friends to meet.
    you sound like a depress kid..
    school isn't really boring if you make it your day and not yur teacher's.
    however...i like your poem. how it's describing how you really think school is boring..
    everone have their own opinion and yours..i can totally picture it right now.
    i know too many ppl that's just like you.
    maybe you can improve this by making it sound more interesting rather making it sound so boring.

    a title...hmm...how about something about boredom...not back to school..it makes it sound so exciting to read.

    -fearless
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude throw the book. I always wanted to but someone would beat me to the punch. Those attention getters, those trend setters, those kiss up chicks in the front row with the great legs. Or I'd fall asleep and miss the whole damn thing. Have fun in school, what's the worst that can happen? Try to get decent grades though it is kind of important what you learn in school, its kind of like the founding blocks of college, not so much life. Have fun boys and girls.
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      aaaaaaaah don't remind me. well, i still have like a month left and i'm trying to enjoy every freaking day of it. i would definitely throw the book too, but you know, that might put me OUT of school for awhile. i don't really know if it's so much that it's missing something or if you could just ramble on more... eh, i don't know. there's actually a lot you could say now that i think about it. old friends. old enemies. cute boys you wanna talk to. girls you wanna beat up. i dunno, use your imagination! you could have a lot of fun with this if you wanted to... ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, throw the book. I always felt like this in American History class, cos my teacher was a former hippie who liked to rant about how this country is going to the dogs. I learned nothing except that the back of my hand looks really strange up close.

    Anyway, good job on this. Funny, very.

    ~ Pina Colada
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Pina Colada | [ Reply to This ]
      Deeps,
    HAH! Nice little poem, if I had the guts I would throw the book at the teacher...geesh, I remember those teachers...how could you stay awake, i'm surprise they stayed awake through their lecture...ahhhhh! so boring, it is...
    Hmmm...i couldn't stop smiling after the book part...it's too funny adn I'm sure every student would love to do that...Walking out...may be a little more difficult...dunno, hey it might get beter as the year progresses...Wow. AP Biology, I use to LOVE Science, but then I got bored...Now it's english and History all the way...yeah, can't see myself in advance science...
    Nice poem and I'm glad you got a new one out...it was refreshing...
    Oh read your journal too, don't worry your bro will do fine here in the states...what school is he going to...
    later days,
    -stacey-
    | Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]


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