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    dots Submission Name: Prayer for Lildots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This is just a short prayer for my friend Lil who is dying. I volunteer with some seniors and Lil has been such a joy. She is 96 and just over the past few days all of her organs are failing. She is very scared. I pray for her to be released and begin her life anew!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!

    I love you Lil and thank God that he brought me a wonderful, eternal friend.

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    dotsPrayer for Lildots
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    Fear not Lil
    for though
    your body
    fails

    The Angels
    of God
    guide your trails

    Preparing your
    soul
    for a spectacular
    flight

    The veil
    has been
    lifted ~
    Glorious Light





    Submitted on 2005-08-04 16:16:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's Very Beautiful. I hope that your friend lil knows Christ. She will be going to a better place. I hope that everything turns out find. That's a great poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww. I'm sorry, but I really understand how you feel. I agree with jlpurvis2001 about this piece. Its very beautiful. I agree, still, with the both of you that she will find a better place.

    ~Miku~
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by WindEmpress | [ Reply to This ]
      that's a very nice poem, short and to the point, filled with images to convey the message. I really like the end
    'The veil
    has been
    lifted ~
    Glorious Light'
    | Posted on 2005-08-04 00:00:00 | by onepieces | [ Reply to This ]
      Good Job on this one, it's always upsetting when you lose a friend, but like you said,
    "The veil
    has been
    lifted ~
    Glorious Light"
    That's what I think about when I lose someone close, they're going to a better place, and they are the lucky ones..Nicely Written.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice tribute to her; wouldn't change a word (I read your journal post). Think you might want to write about these people. Besides being therapeutic for you it would be nice for them too.
    Hope you feel better. I think seeing someone in their last days or hours makes us all think...

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi again epiphany! I must say i'm a big fan of your poetry, you always manage to keep it fresh and different, you never bore me lol!
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this was a tear jerker. I love the way you brouhgt comfort with your words in this poem. Once again, a good job. I'm sorry to hear that about Lili. I think you made her day. You definately made mine. Good job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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