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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 737
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1486



    Description:
       this is much longer then what i usaually right i get alot of comments saying my work is short so when i wrote this last night i figured id ppost it to see what you think it is in reference to a thought i was having having about my husband being hurt or killed at work it sounds awfull i know but he is a driller and hi job is bery dangerous he often comes home with a story of a coworker being injured thus making my mind wander


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    I drove down the old dirt road
    Remembered that first night
    You said it was all you’d dreamed.
    I conjured up that vision
    Your arms heavy around me.
    I could sleep like that then
    Now it suffocates me
    In the midst of my memory something went wrong.
    Flashes of metal, the echo of the machine.
    The sun like always is blinding.
    I hear your voice thunder over the noise.
    And then his response .
    You step from the control panel
    To look to his direction
    It happens
    High above
    A snapping
    The sound is like an egg breaking
    Magnified though .
    He runs to you calm but trembling
    Phone in hand he dials 3 numbers
    It fades after that
    I realize the car has stopped
    I punch the gas aware of lights on in the trailer
    Heads tilted eyes peering through its windows .
    I squeal to a stop in our drive way .
    Heart pounding, hands sweaty.
    I tremble from somewhere inside
    My core shaken
    I want to run to you
    Have you make it stop
    Make the seen unseen.
    I know what you’d say though
    Another rampant illusion
    A product of witches blood
    And overreaction
    You’d hold me
    Then kiss my forehead on your way out .
    I wont be sleeping for sometime.
    What a gift
    What a curse
    Steals the time
    Makes the love hurt




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      how could people have looked at this and nto commented??, its really really.. strong.. quick rush of emotion.. one of the onlythat i've read taht i actually get really really into it and i didnt have to skim over it.. which is a good thing
    keep it up :)
    Danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]


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