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    dots Submission Name: PYRAMIDdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       i had a dear friend tell me once that i use i ,you and the in my work to much he said hed love to have a name to go with the I heheheh so i wrote this for him

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    My darling Elizabeth, it seems a hundred years since you last smiled for me .
    I wish I could take the pain , pull it over me. Feel it like you feel it.
    I want to know every detail of ever hurt you have ever endured.
    I am dying to understand you .
    As I gaze in to this glass you are reflected in my eyes.
    Your beauty puts me beside myself still after all these years .
    There is heaven of that I’m sure and the way is through you and beyond me.
    I love you Elizabeth , don’t fight yourself this way .
    It is a waste of a perfectly good soul.

    Submitted on 2005-08-04 19:49:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ouch the pain resounds in the hallowed places of the world for this beautiful piece. I love the love you add to this poem and the mystery of this Elizabeth beckons to me to ask for more.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      Put more in your descriptions, i think you could take this piece further and describe it in a more beautiful way, i saw a few clichés in there.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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