Description: This is a poem describing a rich boy finally coming face to face with a poor boys reality that he wont always get everything he wants.......his cherry was busted by a girl refusing his come on
A Cherry Busted -------------------------------------------
The reality has set in
The pain will now begin
He has accepted it
He will never get over it
The girl blew it
The first time..
to feel despair
to feel sadness
to feel rage
to turn the page
and feel madness
No longer is he confident
He will never feel great
His heart has finally
recieved It's fate
There will never be
All memories of gettin
what he wants have
He never knew of this phase
Never knew his confidence,
his cherry, would ever be busted
i enjoyed it. i love the metaphor of the popped cherry and thought it was very effective. it really gets across the boys insecurities that he would completely lose his confidence from one rejection, and it shows the truth in human nature and how we focus on our failures and not our sucesses.
Umm... let's see, I thought it was a confucing poem. If I hadnt read the description I wouldnt have known what the hell you were talkin bout. The flow was a little off, and the first thing I thought of when I read the title was way off from what the poem was really about.lol.
hahaha...amusing. The whole cherry thing threw me off too! It's a common thing I see amongst my friends. Girl and boy alike. And in that light, I pity them. Such dorks for thinking they're immune to the bountiful opinions of this world. Teach 'em well.
I got a laugh out of this... I was lured by the title. This reminds me of the movie Pretty in Pink where there are all these rich kids trying to exploit each other. I guess this is a reminder that karma always slaps everyone around. xo lilham
To those who do not know of cherries...well they're usually used in reference for when a female has lost her virginity..."pop the cherry" something like that...so I think a cherry is a perfect comparison...and this was indeed quite humorous...well, because the end...everything but the one thing he can't buy...well, you can...but I mean...can't buy...you catch my drift...anyways, this was a nice laugh considering all the break-up poems i've seen thus far... nice one. -stacey-
Again I like the idea of cherry busted, but the wording isn't what it could be. Its easy to get madness and sadness into a structure, etc. Aren't you angry when you can't get what you want? Wouldn't some spoiled little sh%t also? Disapointment is only half of the image. Keep up the good work and the comments. Rock on.
the cherry is a good meatphor but it already has such a strong conotatio with losing ones virginity that the confidence thing wuld nto have dawned upon me if i had not read your summary.
this poem seems more liek a pile of ideas jotted down. like you're gettign everythign about hwo the boy is feleing onto the pge. howeer emtions alone do not make poetry. emotion is the soul of a poem but eveyrthing else is words and phrases and the pictures a poem paints. a poem is painting with words. this read more liek stage directions for an actor tyring to embody a charatcer emotionally, great direction but little else.
also who says that the rich have evrything they want? a poor boy as you put it may be far more contented than a billionaires son. harri
hehe, well i have a dirty mind cuz i was thinkin... oh, that would be popped wouldn't it... anyway... *picks mind up out the gutter, blows on it*...
i am curious. why compare his confidence to a cherry? i can think of other fruits... like some that are easily bruised that i might have picked, but i wonder why you specifically choose cherry. i think that you could probably go somewhere with this, but you should probably elaborate more (i hate doing this, i'm sorry). explain the exchange between the guy and the girl that "busted his cherry". maybe play off the emotions that he might have felt a little bit more. you can do so much more with this in my opinion. but that's only my opinion. otherwise, what you have is fine. oh, and welcome to the site. ...bb...