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    dots Submission Name: Thouroby Fairdots
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    Author: BrokenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 178/156/47
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
    Total Views: 370
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1116



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       I wrote this a while back. It's going on here by request from a friend. Any commments welcome.


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    dotsThouroby Fairdots
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    Welcome to the Thouroby Fair
    Where times await you both good and bad
    Watch now as your friends die
    When my bullet goes through their eyes
    Run now run from Thouroby Fair
    When no on eis watching, you'll find yourself dead
    Go now hide from my prying eyes
    Trying to find a safe haven from me, oh my
    Run now run from Thouroby Fair
    No one will help you, nobody cares
    Watch now as I pass you by
    You sigh with relief, but I'm still there
    Run now run from Thouroby Fair
    Don't look behind you, because that's where I am
    Feel the pain shoot through your side
    As you look up to see my eyes
    Run now run from Thouroby Fair
    Your end is coming, it's almost here
    Watch the grin pass over my face
    As your blood quickly leaces its home
    Now your world is going black
    But your you there's no coming back
    Run now run from Thouroby Fair
    Nobody has ever escaped from me
    I am the watcher, the killer
    And I'll get to you all




    Submitted on 2005-08-04 21:55:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a medeocre peom.. not bad but not extraordinary.. theres typos here and there that might make it read smoother but its okay, maybe if you try to skip out ever other Welcome to the Thouroby Fair it might make the point more poignant *sp* but its an ok write over all
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      It kinda reminded me of Iron Maiden's "Fear of the Dark", and I was indeed singing it under my breath to the tune of that song. Nice one, although "Thouroby Fair" is kinda a cumsy pronunciation. Try out some other name if you can.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Roberto Santos | [ Reply to This ]
      This was dark and morbid. I had trouble keeping up with it, because it all sounded like a scary movie throughout. I couldn't make heads or tails of the meaning. I liked the flow and word usage, it was like reading a killing fest. Overall, very good.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]



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