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    dots Submission Name: Opening my eyes(wakin up)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 427
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1497



    Description:
       this is wakin up with an added verse


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    dotsOpening my eyes(wakin up)dots
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    wakin up to drunkin step dad
    beatin on my mom almost all I ever had
    depressed and wanna die and shit aint gonna change
    never got money always scrappin up some change
    growin up people thought I was diranged
    and they may have been right, but neither one I'll ever claim
    later in my life my mom was depressed
    the suicide of the guy of which she's obsessed
    it hurt her so bad she never was the same
    poppin pills to dull the pain
    its a horrible thing to watch a loved one slowly die
    every day i seem to ask the question why

    I can't stand to look at myself like this
    no more hurting me, or slittin my wrists
    no more death or pain in my life
    no more hard work to end my strife
    no more shanxxx, no more blood
    if I could end it all, you best believe that I would
    I don't wanna be like my brothers dad
    pain upon life that I ain't never had
    can't stop smokin shit, if I do then I get mad
    but sometimes when I do the shit, it kinda make me sad
    I don't wanna end up a mutha fuckin base head
    But if I keep this up thats the place I'm gonna head
    I don't wanna be there, it hurts me to think
    what its like to throw my wife and kids out, then the sink
    I'm sorry if what I say don't make sense
    I need help, goin to get it, be back in ten minutes





    Submitted on 2005-08-04 22:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really it only takes ten min. to get help where did u go. I need to go there. I am srry that u were feelin so depressed at the time. This really didn't happen did it? If it did I feel really bad that u and ur bro had to go through that. N-E-ways this was a really good poem and I will keep readin ur stuff. Laterz.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      I am overwhelmed. This is really something. I really love that last line. It's all, this life is sh*t, I don't wanna be like this, I'm bummed, yada yada, but I've still got my god d*mn sense of humor! Good job. I am right there with you on that stepdad stuff. He never touched my mom, but the verbal abuse we all received was an atrocity.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I am overwhelmed. This is really something. I really love that last line. It's all, this life is sh*t, I don't wanna be like this, I'm bummed, yada yada, but I've still got my god d*mn sense of humor! Good job. I am right there with you on that stepdad stuff. He never touched my mom, but the verbal abuse we all received was an atrocity.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I see that your work is very real, and it leaves a mark on the reader. Also makes me wanna read more of your work because i know it will be "real" and shows what some peoples lives can consist of, alot of times it's not candy coated sh*t, either. But you can write!
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Static | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i fell you strongly. i feel like you almost. dad beating mom...slitting wrists...smoking [censored]...being just...all you can be...you cant be happy...wow...im really doin no good... but i just fell you...alot...


    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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