Crawl into my arms
find comfort in my voice
turn to me when all else fails
I’m always here
Arms spread wide
tissues in hand to wipe your eyes
I'll croon you to sleep
all the nights
placing soft kisses upon your face
Crawl into my arms
find comfort in my voice
turn to me
when all else fails
I’m always here
Arms spread wide
tissues in hand
to wipe your eyes
I'll croon you to sleep
all the nights
placing soft kisses
upon your face
Very nicely written, wretched (if I may call you that); beautifully rendered and soothing. For some reason, I'm left with the impression these are words you'd love someone to whisper in your ear even as you softly sing them to the world. To recieve the same sort of comfort one offers to a beloved is often rare indeed.
It seems to be okay as it is, if I say so myself. The only error I found was the "hear/here" spelling hiccup, but that's really nothing to do with the piece as a whole.
I thought it was some nice thoughts, and I liked how you said you would be waiting with tissues to wipe tears away, that was good, and cooning to sleep as well. Very relaxing indeed. Nice work.
I think you mean "croon" (as in softly singing) and here, but the poem is good otherwise. This is very sweet. I'm not sure you need to add more, but I'm a minimalist, so I tend to think that way.
This is really nice. Tender feelings of love and caring. Makes one smile just to read it and imagine it. Just a couple of spelling errors... otherwise, you've done a sweet job here. It takes a gentle soul to care for someone in this way. To want to "be there" for them in their darkest moments.. to soothe and love away their pain or sadness. That kind of love is precious. Take care! ~Sandra
this was very nice, just a few spelling glitches or typos. and I think you mean spoon instead of coon but no matter. it's lovely and reminds me of dream visitor which unfortunately I'm trying to forget!
'Crawl into my arms find comfort in my voice turn to me when all else fails I’m always hear (here) Arms spread wide tissues in hand to wipe your eyes I'll coon (spoon) you to sleep all the nights placing soft kisses upon you (your) face'
I put the corrections in parentheses. But it's a beautiful poem; touching!
This made ME want to crawl into your arms for that kind of comfort! Sometimes we all need exactly what you are offering in your poem. But not too many people offer such comfort to others...I really like 'tissues in hand to wipe your eyes' - it's like you are just waiting to nurture someone when they are in need. I like this poem - it made me feel good to know there is still so much love and comfort in people.
wow so i'm about ready to go back to bed, after reading this, because it made me feel very relaxed, comforted even. i like the very idea of it, and there was only a few mistakes, but i see others pointed those out, all in all this was pretty good -steph
this is very sweet and i could have used a poem like this from some one more than a few times. i think that you could make it better by adding to it. but it is very sweet the way it is. take care.
Submission Name: dream visitor
