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    dots Submission Name: superMan's capedots
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    Author: bLiNdFAiTh
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 15/13/5
    Words: 430
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 219
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2684



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       new drink, here it is off the top of my head...
    hit it from everyside..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotssuperMan's capedots
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    you, must, be, truly insane
    if you thank for a second,
    i'd stoop, to ya level,
    and play ya childish games--
    i might have, at one time,
    denied my infatutation, and lied, and set aside advice, in a vain attempt to hide
    that i even i deny--
    You, are, truly insane...

    what the fuck is goin on off in your brain
    why the hell cant you thank ljust ike i thank
    now, who is, truly insane
    maybe what you need is to be just like me,
    with bruises, cuts thats bleed,
    screamed at and beat,
    scarred until you weep, and believe what i believe.
    ...not a peep, you hear me?
    ...just be like me
    keep what you think to yourself, secretly.
    like i said, not a peep... okay?
    Who's Insane? ...thats right,
    now go wipe ya stupid face!
    ...You, are, truly insane

    now who are you to say
    that the way that it is today's
    the way its always been
    and thangs aint gonna change
    "itll always be the same"
    and the chance of that's
    hands down, the saddest thang
    "bow ya heads now, we'll pass around this plate
    pretend like yall gon pray
    andwell pretend we dont get paid"

    with the masses entertained,
    and waitin on god's grace;
    they debate thier faith,
    and praise what they thank,
    deliver thanks in what ever way
    and then to get thier sin forgiven
    scrape thier knees,
    and whisper screams of desperate pleas
    in search for missing links,
    but never for a second,
    will they ever think to question.
    the rules to the game
    the tools of the trade
    a full day wasted pullin supermans cape
    not to mention they way their blind faith
    is pulled around and shaped
    by fools who run a blind mans race
    faithful and courageous
    embrace the bible as a cane
    then parade downtown
    dont stop, but toss out--
    'word of day' phrases
    torn away from the pages
    of a book that keeps us waitin...
    --savor the adiction candy patience little kids
    what the hell is goin on?!
    for god's sake!
    You, are, truly insane
    yes its destined that we're on our way
    You, are, truly insane
    and at this rate, just keep up the pace,
    good Luck homeboy, 'Break a leg'
    You, are, truly insane
    just Believe when i say things Can always change... i just hope its not too Late





    Submitted on 2005-08-05 03:06:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      thank should defintily be changed to think;
    but other than that, i think you just need to clean up the typing and the gramatical stuff like putting ' , . - and capitals and such but other than that the idea is good might need a little polishing here and there but good write in general
    danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem is like a crazy car crash and parts and peices ../ are going everywhere / its got good drama ../. and the hook fades in and out ../. other then that i really love the line
    'will they ever think to question.' / now thats a stab at great art
    JWI
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]
      Not at all a good poem, but it's perfectly acceptable as a rap song. Good rap, Bad poem! lol! Just make sure you put it over a tight track though.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]



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