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    dots Submission Name: FEELING NOTHINGdots

    Author: HECATE_Sservant
    ASL Info:    20/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 126/142/44
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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       It's sort of gruesome, but if you've read any of my other work you know what to expect. Most of the time, I try to hold in the gore, and bad images but this time I let it all out. It's about a friend that I had that I really counted on and she just left me. And when she came back she expected my opened arms...I think not. Sorry if it's a little blunt....

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    I'm on the floor.
    Take me now.
    Tie me down,
    tear me apart.
    My heart is out,
    rip it up.
    Take my soul.
    Kill me slowly.

    This is funny,
    I feel nothing.
    I'm so hurt...
    I'm beyond pain.

    Kick me.
    Laugh at my tears.
    Cut me up.
    Make me bleed.

    Kill me now.
    Make it hurt.
    Since you left...
    I feel nothing.

    Submitted on 2005-08-05 10:54:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Isn't it ironic? that even when you say you feel nothing you're still feeling something. I think maybe you could have done this more creatively, but as I say to most people that as long as you can tap into your emotions that's always a plus.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      I am left with the feeliong that you do feel pain. So much pain over the loss of someone that you feel nothing else but that pain. I think that the poem is good. Good in the sense that it is short and concise, as to make it much easier for you to get your point across and easier to understand. Good write. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree - you must feel something to sit down and write. As far as your friend is concerned - we all make mistakes in our lives and perhaps on the horizon lies a poem in your mind about a reconciliation.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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