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Sometimes When I'm Alone...


Author: playcrackthesky
ASL Info:    21/f/IA
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Class/Type: Misc /Comedy
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I think I have weird friends, that give me these ideas, but I love them nonetheless. Enjoy this little escape from reality.


Sometimes When I'm Alone...



Sometimes when I’m alone
In my own bedroom
I pretend I am giant.

I have claws that could tear open
That damn hole in those pouch drinks
And I wouldn’t spill a bit of juice.

I would have green skin! Yes I would
So I’d blend right into my bathroom walls
And write little notes in the dust of the windows.

I’d have short little hands
That no one would find funny
They’d be perfect to search through the closet
To find that hidden chocolate bar…

Sometimes when I’m alone
In my own bedroom
I pretend I’m a dinosaur.




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  Ooo, this reminds me of childhood dreams & moments. When everything is innocent. Very well written, I felt like a child once again.
| Posted on 2008-07-31 00:00:00 | by kickit | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, I went by title here and wow. This is like the most perfect little kids poem. Doubtful that either my 18 or 15 year old would find it cute being read to them now, but I think I'm saving this gem for WAY in the future grandkids...

This just has "smile" written all over it. I don't know how to describe it - it brightens a mood, I would imagine - no matter how dismal.
You make rhyming seem so effortless and comfortable.

Well done,
Lisa
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
  hahaha! Awww! Steph this is too friggin cute! This was such a fun poem to read and I smiled the whole way through it Reminds me of when I was a kid...like 2 days ago...hahaha...and I run around with my arms extended making airplane noises and dive bombing noises pretending to be a B52 bomber. Come to think of it I always wonder why all the people in the checkout line always stare at me funny hahahaha. No seriously, yeah I am serious! hee hee! Great poem here! Thanks for the fun! Take care!

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  From my experience, the key to not spilling the juice is to not hold the pouch too firmly. Ease up your grip and the straw will go in flawlessly, no juice sacrificed. :) Haha.

But enough of that, and more on the poem. I thought it was really good. Reminds me of when I was younger and I used to pretend I was all sorts of whacky things. I like when a poem can make me smile. Good jorb.

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| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Mrs Peabody | [ Reply to This ]
  I always wanted to be a dinosaur too. This was fun and very enjoyable to read. I liked your descriptions and the overall feeling it gave. Made me smile reading it. Cool beans. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  This was cute. It's fun to pretend, though I can't remember the last time I did that. I have that same problem with those blasted pouch drinks too! If I had a dollar for every ounce of juice I spill trying to open that blasted thing! :)
This was a great escape from reality and I really enjoyed reading it!
Candi
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, i like this, it was funny...it made me laugh anyways. i like people who are creative like this, therefore, i respect this poem a great deal. I liked the use of imagination in this, how you would think of this giant and form it to overcome all the little obstacles in life, like the pouch drinks. I hate those! haha...well anyways, like i said, i really enjoyed the imaginative (?) use in this poem. Great work.
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  OH! also, it would be cool to add on to this, you know to talk about the dinosaur and what it would do...just an idea...but i like this alot.
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, very different from your usual stuff but a nice break, if you will. This reminded me of an episode of Malcolm in the Middle where everyone acts really immature, lol, sorry, but you did use the phrase: "escape from reality" which I think sums up this piece nicely, lol.

Also, you can't away from the randomness can you? "And I wouldn't spill a bit of juice." Okay, you got me there for random but it was all enjoyable and as I said, a nice break.

Keep the sillyness,
-james
| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  This was so fun to read. I hope you keep your goofy friends because their imagination and yours paid off to create a silly and funny poem to read.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed it. very simple, and cute. You do have a interesting but lovely imagination. We all wish we could be some kinda animal sometimes. I sure do, just to get away...
anyway, cool write.
TAke care,
JADE
| Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by JADE | [ Reply to This ]
  That reminded me of when I was a little kid, I would go into my room, and pretend I was Mufasa from the Lion King, and noone could defeat me. Especially not Scar. It shows me your inner child. You have such a unique way of showing your innocent side. It really, as simple and cute as it was, is beautiful. It shows that no matter what, you can go visit a world outside of this one, and be perfectly at peace with yourself. That is what life is all about. I honestly loved it. It was very fun to read.
| Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by poeticvisionary | [ Reply to This ]
  This by far...has to be the CUTEST thing I have read on this site. You really gave me a pure smile. You sounded so innocent as though you were in touch with your inner child. Which, makes people like me get in touch with their inner child. Thank you for this.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  I find so much comfort in knowing I'm not the only one who spills juice when trying to puncture the juice pouch...my problem is i alway stick the straw completely through the other side lol

I can see why this is on Li LI's favs...sounds like something she does too! lol
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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