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    dots Submission Name: How Would You Feel?!dots
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    Author: Beast
    ASL Info:    24/ M/ Planet Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 232/133/28
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Rant/Angst
    Total Views: 295
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1312



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       I dont care if the structure sucks, coz I mean every single word I said...all that is from a real experience...


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    dotsHow Would You Feel?!dots
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    How would you feel if you were suddenly exiled for no good reason, found yourself all alone –abandoned by the ones who mattered the most- faced by things that you were never prepared for, forced to give up your beliefs, morals and everything you ever held dear? Forced to do things you despised, things that you’d have never done, forced to give up your freedom and live as a slave –doing everything you’re ordered to do with no questions asked no matter how wrong humiliating. Forced to see life goes on around, things change while you are frozen stiff at your place like a tree trunk in a dead pond. Forced to see your life through a 3rd person's eye as if this life ain't yours. Forced to bear the weight of the chains of slavery every single day, reminded constantly that you are a salve by the thorns around your neck and the leash held by your master that you never see. Forced to see people around you enjoy their right to live while you had to give up yours, and what makes things worse is that you are –to those people- invisible. Everyday that passes by leaves its mark on your body as well as your soul, bruising you and giving you wounds that will never heal…

    And you still ask me to bear and stop whining. Well…lets' switch places and see how would you fee!...




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      I would feel much the same as you feel. Quite ticked to the point of ELOSION. No one should ever have to feel this way. Lets all break the chains together!!!! Lets hope these are metaphorical chains because real chains are kind of hard to break

    Did it feel good to get this out? I love purging, I always feel so refreshed afterwards...a little pissed, but refreshed none-the-less.

    I hope you aren't in this situation anymore, I honestly do.

    STAY STRONG!!!!!

    Bon
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      so, this is from real experience?
    obviously i'm curious.
    when did you have thorns around your neck?
    where? why? how long?
    it's interesting to read...
    | Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      Tell us how you REALLY feel dear. Tee-hee. Let that damn anger out. I applaud you for this piece and telling us like it is. I will NEVER from here on out tell you to suck it up and bear it.


    Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read!
    <3BCute
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      My apologies for assuning that you were Palestinian. Just my ignorance to blame for that one I'm afraid. It's too late to edit my earlier comment or I would change it for you. Again - I'm sorry. Thanks - Bill
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      Palestinian I presume? You've done a wonderful job of portraying their experience. Or should I say how they feel about their experience. I do hope a solution will be found in our lifetime and that you can return home with your head held high. In the mean time I'm glad to see that you've found your way to Egypt.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      no one would feel good, ppl aren’t made to be treated like that. the person in this position should never stop whining over it, cause it isn’t right. life’s meant to be enjoyed not forced upon a person.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by wretched_muse | [ Reply to This ]
      I would feel hurt,angry,betrayed,bitter and MURDEROUS. I would want to take out my revenge and hurt and hate on the first person who looked at me the wrong way. I would feel that this life is not worth living...then something inside me would almost certainly rise to the moment, and change all of my emotions to indifference...and I would cease to care about anything or anyone ever again.
    Sorry if this seems harsh, but that is what I feel inside after reading your work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Terrible... I wouldnt be able to stand that. No one should be treated that way EVER in their lives. I really hope this isnt happening to you. You should be free and allowed to keep your beliefs and morals. You should be enjoying the time that is given to you.. not being treated harshly as a slave.
    Brooke
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]



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