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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye or Hello?dots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 405
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       THe last time we were "together" he stayed for three hours after we were done, just talking, and lying in my arms, and watching tv. We were doing what we used to do, when we were together. And he kissed me like he meant it. And I don't know what to do anymore. It was just perfect.
    This is just an outpouring of those feelings. I wasn't really worried about the flow or any of that. This is just raw emotion. Be gentle!

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    dotsGoodbye or Hello?dots

    I pretend to be asleep cause I know that's what you want,
    My nude limbs tangled up in my sheets.
    I have to fight not to squirm as I hear the door open,
    And listen as you remove the shoes from your feet.
    You lift the sheet from my torso,
    Cool air rushes in.
    I shiver with anticipation
    As your fingers brush my skin.
    The smell of your body stirs my senses.
    You start to slip inside of me.
    My body automatically arches upward to meet yours.
    You raise me up to my knees.
    You move in and out, slow, then fast.
    You bury your face in my hair.
    You inhale my scent, and all my worries,
    And right now, I'm without a care.
    You slowly nuzzle my neck.
    Your mouth searches for mine.
    I turn to meet your hungry lips
    As you pound into me from behind.
    Then, suddenly, I'm on my back,
    And you're inside me once again.
    And I look into your eyes, and I guess I smile
    Because you give me the sexiest grin.
    I'm drifting somewhere between fantasy and reality
    Because you are everything that I want.
    This moment is perfection.
    Every skill you have, you flaunt.
    You kiss me over and over again.
    You've turned me inside out.
    Every ounce of willpower I possess
    Disappears at the touch of your mouth.
    You whisper into my ear,
    Using your soft, sexy voice
    "How you doin, baby?"
    I guess this was my choice.
    I catch my breath and whisper an answer.
    "Better, now," you say.
    Better than I've ever been,
    If only you would stay.
    So we go on in this game we play
    Are we just fucking, or is this more?
    I don't know where any of this is leading,
    What surprises life may have in store.
    All I know is the scent of your skin,
    The touch of your fingertips,
    The warmth where our bodies meet,
    The power of your lips.
    Time has no meaning here,
    But it never lasts as long as it should.
    I lie in a sex-filled haze
    Because you felt so damn good.
    When it's over, you're still here.
    Instead of running out the door,
    You lie here in my arms.
    I feel like there's still more.
    Hours pass in this perfect state,
    But it's finally time for you to go.
    Is this real, it doesn't feel like good-bye.
    It feels more like hello.

    Submitted on 2005-08-05 12:40:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can definately relate to this poem. I have been there and this too is such a frustrating feeling! The poem was really good. The flow was just a little bit choppy, but other than that I enjoyed reading it! Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      um. maybe you should just elaborate the ending a little bit. otherwise it was really good. i can tell that u like this guy a lot! and u feel good when u r in his arms. i liked it its just the ending! but if u like it then u can keep it! good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice as well. I liked the rhyme and flow to this poem. I think you may want to sort out your feelings when you are NOT so aroused. Then you can decide where this is going, or just ask him. So far looks like you have ticket on a merry-go-round of feelings. I hope you find your anwsers and some peace of mind. Good writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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