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    dots Submission Name: SEX & BEYONDdots

    Author: xtremegentleman
    ASL Info:    22/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595/778/82
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSEX & BEYONDdots

    I want to make love to every inch of your frame
    Insert my pleasure and make you call out my name
    I want you to flow like a waterfall south
    Take both sets of your lips and put them in my mouth

    I want you to sweat every piece of the passion
    I want us to sex 'til there's complete satisfaction
    I want you to squeeze me with every stroke below
    Let the candles burn out...I will find that warm hole

    My tongue will tease you...baby I need you
    The positions will be switching...I'm going to please you
    The sheets will be soaked, our minds will be gone
    Lost in the stereo to Luther's love songs

    My "good bar" will rise, your "goodies" will stay wet
    Desire only for each other--our version of safe sex
    You will feel every inch slide into your sea
    And I will ride every wave until you wash up on my beach

    Emmmm...that's loving...I feel so complete
    And that kiss on the cheek makes it all the more sweet
    Yes...I love you too and that always will be
    Now before you fall asleep cuddle with me

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      Luther is the perfect choice for this kind of moment.. I loved it perfect combanation of sweet and naughty!!
    great title.. fits perfectly!!
    | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      well, I am genuinely impressed. I read a lot of sexual poems (and write a lot of them, too), but I think this is the first one written by a guy that I have ever read. And I must say, you live up to your name. Every ounce the gentleman. I think this is a very moving portrayal of what some deem as "making love." And typically, I would say the cuddle thing at the end would ruin it for me, but it just goes so well after the experience that you've had from this. Excellent job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I haven't been here for awhile but I'm glad to see that everyone decided to get there's while now I am not. Damn you must be able to work wonders with that tongue. I love men who aren't ashamed to express all of there sexual desires. I on the other hand have not experienced all I would like to. True I am a FREAK!! But there is always something new to try...I'm glad you didn't just write this poem like you were doing some hoe... The cuddling part helped. Well there were some spots where floetry was not working so well, but otherwise this was a great write Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      *staring at page with a look of shock* *licks lips and closes mouth*

    I am speachless! seriously...wow...*clears throat* *smoothes down shirt and skirt*

    okay, there is nothing I would change on this...okay wait...I wasnt feeling the usage of "hole" but it does fit very nicely into that stanza so it made up for it.

    this was just dripping passion and I will admit had me completely thinking about times with a close friend...once you find passion like this...it is hard to find it in anyone else...excellent write B...you sure did twist me up in this one.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok...this is the second time today that I've needed a smoke and a cold shower! LOL
    I'm gonna say something kinda similar to what I said earlier today about the other post...
    yours was a bit heavier, but there was an element of passion that didn't just make it a hardcore piece to read! I really like that. This is the most beautiful thing that can happen between 2 people that love each other and you captured the animal aspect of it as well as the deep emotional part of it. I love how you were the one asking to cuddle there at the end! That was a nice touch! :)
    Great job!
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. I like the end.

    "And that kiss on the cheek makes it all the more sweet
    Yes...I love you too and that always will be
    Now before you fall asleep cuddle with me"

    That's so sweet. I like the interesting descrpitions. Great wording and very creative. I love it although I can't exactly relate. I've never had sex with someone i was actually in love with, so I wouldn't really know how that part feels. But anyways... eww i just knocked over a bottle of Snapple lol I have to go. Great job

    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Very passionate... and a little too visual for my young eyes. hehehe. Oh well. Congrats to you on some wonderful descriptions and wording. The ending was a good close to the piece and it is comforting to me that you actually LOVE the person you were being intimate with. So many people engage in casual sex and share no feelings of love and comapssion with each other. Hats off to you.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooh wow this is such an INCREDIBLE piece...My goodness Id love to lay with you reach that point of bliss, just a joke, but this is such a PHENOMENAL potrayal of that INTIMATE moment, I can only wish that more ppl cld give in more effort just to ehnance their hmmmm love distrubition skills hahaha, but on the real I loved the passion that this piece invoked in me. Surely you were on a spiritual high when you wrote this cuz its so PURE and immaculate..I felt sanctified when I read this piece!This is so so damn...mind blowing, I would'nt edit anything from this its PERFECT!Thanx4 sharing this really beautiful expression with us!Warmest Rgds Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this.as something with some passion and with a flow.. i could definitly feel this, as something sensual and a love write.. i liked the first stanza the best, its hard to start something off that strong.. nice little write brian
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      A guy dat wants to cuddle-da dudes around in SA somehow aint in2 dat sh*t much- or mayb im just pickn da wrong ones . . .dis was a nice read, sultry sexy, extremely explicit yet with loads of sophistication!Well done X ... Da mood u set in dis poem is damn well contagious!

    Keep spreading da love . . .and ur honeys legs!

    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      well damn boy, you just made it three degrees hotter than hell!

    this was... *inhales* amazing. feel like just reading this... damn, got me thinking things i shouldn't be thinking so early in the morning. what i love about this is that it's love not lust... no trashy "just straight up f*cking for the hell of it" or anything like that, but actual romance. very descriptive... nice imagery... would say i could see it in my head, but i really wouldn't want to lol. cuddling is the best part i think. just to have your love one hold you close... *dreamy sigh*... need to cuddle up with a carton of chunky monkey now... ...bb...

    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      I have never read an erotic piece written by a man. Especially one with taste. You did this very warmly. I am not one that likes "gringy" writing. This really made me smile. You have really found a peace within yourself in this write. As though you took all of your sexual frustrations out on the pen and paper.

    Good job B!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      yes! this was [censored]in funny and sexy! someones a little horny...lol! this is gonna be one of my favs easily! i love it! it was passionate and a bit pervish at the same time! i loved every line of this poem...great job!

    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! i really liked that. i dont usually enjoy reading stuff about sex but this was an acception. the way you portrayed it was beautiful.
    thanks for the feed back on my poem love is a game. sometimes i get on a roll and cant stop writing...even though im not going through a heart break i can still put myself in the mental position to understand.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      Well! Brian, wow! This is just great! How completely sexy and hot is this?! I really enjoyed reading this as it was very involved and quite explicit but even better it was so well written and really lovely and beautiful! It wasn't just about having sex with someone ya know. It was about love and feelings and the strong desire to please and satisfy the person you love. That is where it is at! The entire poem is extremely well done but that last stanza just warms my heart! Ya know the kiss on the cheek and the I love you and the cuddling before you go to sleep! That is just great! What a nice poem you have written! Awesome! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaaahhh...yeah maynard...this is good stuff. I liked how it was written from beginning to the end and the moment was just explained so vividly and in a respectful fashion. Well done. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats so sweet. I wish my man would write some thing like that for me. I thought it was very emotional and it had so much passion in it. The metoforers were great. i just love it when people say what they want to say but not really saying it. It makes every thing much literary and exciting. Great job

    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by animal07 | [ Reply to This ]
      dang look at my boi x spittin all that dope [censored] i really like that one i look the rhyme and the way it flowed it was off the chain

    heavy knowledge
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]

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