This is quite good with some excellent rhyme ... (suggestion: if you give the second line in each stanza the same number of syllables--say 5 syllables, you will notice the poem moves along more quickly with a much more musical tone) I like it muchly ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
Wow, you write well. Your vocabulary is amazing. This poem is making me want to go and learn some more words. I really loved this. The rhyming scheme was nice, and I like how you used all of those scary words in a good way. It was a sweet poem, that made me wish I had someone that special.
hey thanx for the comment on untitled i am glad you enjoyed it is a little short but i did not want to ramble on i had appox 300 poems on this site some very long and others in various dark fantasy death and love but i deleted i took your advice to read some of your thoughts this one is very peaceful and it seems you wee in a very nice place when writing great read i will look for more on you work when i am on the site thanx for your comment sandman
wow I liked this very much.. how you took the beginning of each phrase and picked the words of description to enter mix and have the same grasp.. grasping at the edges of my thought to make me see that awsome relation between words but then adding the sensual feeling also great! Penny