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    dots Submission Name: still me verse 2dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       same basis as the first one. please comment. read it at least.


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    dotsstill me verse 2dots
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    i hope i'll never change
    even if i get ahead of the game
    i'll stay the same if i have 2 etch it into my brain
    outside as i look 2 the sky
    as the rain falls all around
    then lightning strikes and i fall 2 the ground
    i crumble as my knees buckle
    bringing me closer 2 earth
    gotta learn 2 be humble
    but never forget what i'm worth
    it's still me even after all the struggles i've seen
    if u watch my videos it'll be me on the screen
    look into the eyes of a man, forget the imposters
    runnin as fast as i can, but i can't reach a doctor
    becuz if being ill was a disease
    i'd already be gone
    2 deal with persacution, u've gotta be strong
    feelins expressed by the deaths of the opressed
    i hate when MCs
    call themselves the best of the best
    the truth is hard, and sometimes hard 2 digest
    it's still me, even if i gotta S on my chest

    Chorus:
    cuz it's still me no matter what happens
    i'm the same whether i'm crying or laughing
    it's still me even after i cease 2 exist
    i'm here every time my name touches ur lips
    it's still me the one and same
    i'm everlasting
    what remains is much more than a name
    it's still me
    repeat chorus




    Submitted on 2005-08-05 16:23:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was an inspiring piece...you have a lot of inner strength that comes out in this one...Again I enjoyed your concepts and what I think inspired you here. Another nice write. thanks for sharing it with us.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your strength as a person shines through this piece, some of your poems I did not like, but I really like this one, it's very good.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      gotta learn 2 be humble
    but never forget what i'm worth

    that part stuck with me because i have a friend(this might not relate to u) who would always let ppl walk over her because she thought she wasnt good enough.but ppl always go to the extreams. either to humble or to pompous. But all that put aside i still liked it.
    much luv

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you did it now with this one! I loved this. And my favorite line is when you said you have 2 learn to be humble yet remeber your worth...powerful words. I can't wait to see you on tv. Remeber me and blow me a kiss. lol. Great flow and rhymes. Great job!
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this verse better than the last! i love the message you are sending...well i thiunk i know what it is...m not sure tho...i think its that people should just be who they are. not what others want them to be. i need that advice!lol!

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      My favorite part is the chorus, 'specially "i'm here every time my name touches ur lips". How people live on through the lives they touched, and the relationships they had. This is good hon.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      i crumble as my knees buckle
    bringing me closer 2 earth
    gotta learn 2 be humble
    but never forget what i'm worth

    that stuck out. that was very significant with the play on staying down to earht. i got it. i enjoyed reading this one because it was inspirational. if u check out my recent jouranl you'll kinda see what i'm talkin bout. identity crsis. i wanna be like troy when i grow up. lol. peace~P
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]


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