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    dots Submission Name: Melodic Dancersdots

    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 804
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       I think the poem speaks for itself. There is no deep meaning to this one. Hope you enjoy. :P

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    dotsMelodic Dancersdots

    The music plays so soft
    As it drifts through the air
    See how gently he wafts
    As he lilts here and there

    One hand on her waist
    Another on her shoulder
    How carefully his hands are placed
    He is much older

    Dance and sway left and right
    The checks on the floor are solid black
    Move and swing all through the night
    He eases his hand onto her back

    He dips her slightly down to the ground
    They make it look so uncomplicated
    They slide along without a sound
    This move had been long awaited

    The music starts to soften even more
    The song has almost ended
    They are exhausted unlike before
    And they are commended

    It's up to the judges from here on out
    They are bent to see there notes
    The crowd lets out a shout
    They wont dash the couples' hopes

    It is time to hear the decision
    They call out the calculations
    The competitors danced with great precision
    The couple smile with a feeling of elation

    They take the medal
    They are not outdone
    They are showered in rose petals
    Because they have won

    Submitted on 2005-08-05 16:34:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good poem, i had no problem following along it flowed so well. I could picture the time, the place and the beautiful dancing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      It was okay, definitely not your best, but it wasn't horrible or anything. The poem itself is good, I just don't care for what it's about. And I like the title, btw. Also, your journal entry made me giggle.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by DreamofOrganon | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty good. I can see the dancers, but they seem to be stuttering in mid-dance. The flow of it seems kind of choppy, but the work all together is very clear.
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      This was neat, I didn't see the story going in this direction. I figured it would be a romance thing at first and then it turns into a competition. Good job! It means I was definately not bored with the piece. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]

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