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    dots Submission Name: Torn Apart: The 2nd Chapterdots

    Author: dylanpoe
    ASL Info:    21 m la
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 322/332/56
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 997
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1996


    TO ALL THE TORN APART READERS: Sorry it took so long, i've had it wrote, just never thought to submit, i sincerly apoligize

    I hope you enjoy and please LET ME KNOW IF YOU WANT A 3RD CHAPTER, BECAUSE I CAN GO ON!!

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    dotsTorn Apart: The 2nd Chapterdots

    In the first, everything was torn apart
    his life and reality became dark
    He's busted outta the cage
    of the Hwy. 8 trailer park
    After losing it all, He got something special
    It's all gone, even the chaos
    This is part 2 to his life,
    there was only one thing lost

    Moved from the desert and up to my throne
    Coming from the depths of society
    to face mountains of adversity
    from being brokenhearted, hated
    and kicked outta the university
    The world now grovels at his feet
    because even after he was torn
    He's still undeafeted

    Gates have been knocked down
    there is a harder spirit, running this town
    Everything was brought before your eyes
    She kicked and cussed him
    but kissed and hugged, after telling lies
    He doesn't even bother with heaven and hell
    Because HE rings societys mayhem bell
    On top of his throne, the man torn apart
    has a whole new story to tell

    With hieroglyphics of his pain described
    From his throne, he leaves the girl meismirized
    That blood stained pen kept in his hand
    So whenever he feels the urge
    He can let everybody know, HE STILL STANDS
    It's all been turned upside down,
    no more the clown
    Fate, Insults, and sadness
    have been eternally replaced
    with Confidence, Sarcasim, and madness
    because her chapter in his book
    has finally been torn out, completly erased

    The assasin now worships the ground he walks
    With shame, guilt, and no free will
    she begs him to talk
    He showed the world the will to move on
    The pain from her bullet has finally passed on
    as he props his feet on his throne
    hits a bush poster with a dart
    and puts the final touches on
    the 2nd chapter of "Torn Apart"

    Submitted on 2005-08-05 22:30:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I read the first part & now part 2 and all I can say is Fantastic!
    Ben, you paint with words such pictures that I can just place myself in this and see it.
    This is exceptional - thank you
    | Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting write...this made me think about myself...Ive had a similar encounter myslef..Its bad enough when those significant other cant open up their hearts. However I loved the flow of this piece...It made me want to weep...quite captivating!Thanks for sharing...Kind rgds Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm ready to read part 3 to this piece! :)
    This is incredible reading these 2 pieces and if the story can keep going, please don't stop! Reading your work is like watching a movie unfold in front of my eyes. Your descriptions are vivid and clear and i have a lot of sympathy for this character. If you have more, I encourage you to continue.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]

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