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    dots Submission Name: Patient at 2:00 pmdots
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    Author: kjb
    ASL Info:    21/male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 256/351/64
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 317
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       This is a bit different then my usual but my writing style is also growing. but still the same me though. hope it is liked.


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    dotsPatient at 2:00 pmdots
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    you've gone stark mad
    the doctor will see you now
    he lays you down on puffy calico bed
    you stare at the cieling
    and follow the cracks in the paint
    to find patterns of sheep, dogs and dragons

    your stomach growls as a violent force
    drives you to the side of your bed
    and vomit precisly onto the floor
    specks and drops spew over the harsh white tile
    the doctor turns in disgust
    as he is by bile projectiles
    cursing under his breath

    he turns to you once more
    still hunched over facing now the floor
    so you stare at the ground
    trying to make patterns out of the meandering crevices
    of dirt
    you make them into wallabys, cats and unicorns
    the mind spins your growing so very dizzy

    he peers at you through those threatening spectacles
    and writes his little notes on that scary notebook
    the ballpoint pen he has is no longer
    a writing instrument but
    a lethal dagger
    so you panic and leap onto the doctor
    pummeling across his face
    with fists of desperation

    you relent back the doctor grabs your wrists
    and commands you to relax
    he is insane you conclude
    with that dagger in his hand
    he really thinks that I should relax
    he is mistaken

    you pounce on him once more
    this time your hands around his vieny old neck
    your shaking so uncontrolably
    that you grow yet more angry
    that he is doing such an atrocity to you
    he brought you into this room
    forced you to lay down
    stares at you with such scrutiny
    He wants you dead
    you want him dead
    hands firm around his neck
    squeezing harder
    harder
    harder
    and snaps his neck

    "Doctor Helmes, are you ok? Sleeping on the job. Now, now you
    know you have another patient at 2:00 this afternoon."

    "Oh my. I must've dosed off. The strangest dream I was having
    a nightmare without a doubt. I think I'm going to retire soon,
    Mrs. Rose."

    "Why? Doctor Helmes. Your doing so well with these poor people."

    "Well, Mrs. Rose. I don't think the field of Psychology
    is right for me anymore. Maybe I need more help then
    these people do."




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      wow. interesting concept. at first i was like, "where are you going with this kevin?" then i read the end and was like "ohhhh a dream" im so obvous. go figure...its 3 am..*sighs*
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]



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