Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: need for speeddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Sanjhana
    ASL Info:    21/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118/154/45
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 683
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 450



    Description:
       i thought of it when i took my first ride on a Royal Enfield Bullet Electra. its one of my dreams..


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsneed for speeddots
    -------------------------------------------


    the wind in my face
    my hair flying wild
    the high i'm feeling
    is far from mild

    the probable joy
    in the ability to control
    a machine so powerful...
    it is my ultimate goal

    a bike to many
    a dream to me
    it just makes me happy
    cant you see?

    my pulse is racing
    an adrenaline rush!
    my desire for one
    i just can't crush




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 14:07:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      is this about you achieving your dream?if it is this is really good! i like the last stanza"
    my pulse is racing
    an adrenaline rush!
    my desire for one
    i just can't crush
    if i got the wrong message explain it to me! thank you ! good job!
    ~AKAILA EVONNE~
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good and fun to read. I felt your joy and you made it plain for us the reader to feel it. I like the simplicity of this poem. It was truly a joy to read.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This has powerfully descriptive words in it. I can feel the blast of wind in my face! Great Job! I only wish it was longer.
    "the wind in my face
    my hair flying wild
    the high i'm feeling
    is far from mild"
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    69550

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Push written by JanePlane
    Giving written by jjd
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Linger written by saartha
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    new moon written by CrypticBard

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry