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    dots Submission Name: need for speeddots
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    Author: Sanjhana
    ASL Info:    21/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118/154/45
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       i thought of it when i took my first ride on a Royal Enfield Bullet Electra. its one of my dreams..


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    dotsneed for speeddots
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    the wind in my face
    my hair flying wild
    the high i'm feeling
    is far from mild

    the probable joy
    in the ability to control
    a machine so powerful...
    it is my ultimate goal

    a bike to many
    a dream to me
    it just makes me happy
    cant you see?

    my pulse is racing
    an adrenaline rush!
    my desire for one
    i just can't crush




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      is this about you achieving your dream?if it is this is really good! i like the last stanza"
    my pulse is racing
    an adrenaline rush!
    my desire for one
    i just can't crush
    if i got the wrong message explain it to me! thank you ! good job!
    ~AKAILA EVONNE~
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good and fun to read. I felt your joy and you made it plain for us the reader to feel it. I like the simplicity of this poem. It was truly a joy to read.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This has powerfully descriptive words in it. I can feel the blast of wind in my face! Great Job! I only wish it was longer.
    "the wind in my face
    my hair flying wild
    the high i'm feeling
    is far from mild"
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]


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