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    dots Submission Name: I Have Been Through...dots
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    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    I have been through thundr'ing storms
    through cold and bitter winds
    I've seen the mighty lightning blaze,
    was struck, and now I mend

    I have been through raging fires
    tasted burning flame
    been scortched and blistered by the heat
    now trying to regain

    I have been through high waters
    The pounding waves, did feel
    drowned by the white tipped ocean spray
    now working hard to heal

    I have been through the depths of passion
    through rapture with a lover
    through enchantment, emotion, and tender love
    I never shall recover




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 14:36:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was wonderful! You write with confidence and eloquence, with attention to diction, punctuation, and spelling; all of these being the hallmarks of a great writer! I liked the story here, and the structure and rhyme scheme was really good!
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      My favorite part of this peom is all the comparisons that are tied together by the last part. There are just so many ways to relate to this. That is perhaps the strongest point of the peom. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by bgmullet | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi! There! I can see that you are digging deeper inside yourself and that is great, but I still think you could do even better, try to think of as many creative ways to describe things as you can.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this poem, it has a great flow except for this one line{was struck, and now I mend} that line kind of sounds out of place, maybe reword it?.. {was struck and now to mend}? Just a thought, but it has emotion and that is good poetry. Thankyou for sharing, smiles...
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by pj5 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like you have been through a lot according to this poem ! I thought it was very very good. I liked the way you planted the image of trying to get over it all, but at the end, you conceed that you will never recover. Well thought out and the rhyming was good as well - well done. One spelling error on the second last line - only a minor comment to a lovely poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      great write and very enjoyable read
    thanx for yor comments
    look forward to reading more of yor posts
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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