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    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
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    She likes to see me cry,
    to know my heart is broke.
    She always has to lie,
    wants me to worry and ask why?

    She loves to hurt my deepest feelings,
    she hates me as she leaves.
    She likes the fact I'm always sad,
    she makes me think she cares for me.

    She always fades my spirits,
    the hope of any love.
    She stabs me in the back,
    as angels laugh above.

    I love her so damn much,
    I'm damned for this is love.
    She hurts me every way she can,
    for her, my love will never be enough.




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 17:21:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very personal and heartfelt poem

    This poem explains perfectly the reason i have never been in love as in a relationship
    I dont think I could stand the pain

    You have overcome many obstacles and she is still there beside you
    That my friend is true love
    Take Care and if you get a chance please take a look at some of my poems and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      omg how sad...unrequited love for the lonely lover. gheesh what a way to bring down my day. so you are a fresno guy huh? i used to live in san andreas, heard of it? i loved it there...cross country oh yeah! anyways tough poem...a few spelling errors:
    quatrain III verse iii-stabes...stabs. a little typo i know. the angels laughing caught my attention...how harsh to think something so pure would laugh at something so sad. anyways im almost a fan of unrequited love poems...ever since i read the five romantic poets:
    Keats, Bryon, Shelly, Browning, and I want to say Cooleridge, but i dont know.
    anyways since ive read some of their poems on unrequited love ive become interested hoping to find some that possesses a little of thier poetic talent. anyways cool little right sad though.

    later days
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      that is a tragedy when someone loves another is treated so contemptuously. when love becomes a one way street it's time to head on out. i had this type i just recently let her go. its not easy. one guy posted the statement "time to ditch the ex and move on to the next" and I did. very crushing write. if this is you, i hope you have better days. mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Gee! This is a write that tells the reader how much pain you are going through. Honey, life goes on. Even though it is hard to let go...let go! Love is not suppose to hurt. Love is suppose to be shared by two. Don't think the person who is hurting you doesn't know what she is doing. She does, and guess what? She will continue because you allow her to get away with it. Pain is not an enjoyable factor. Hurt is a feeling that is hard to get over but, you can. It's not fair to allow yourself to be open over and over and over to hurt. It's not fair and it's not good. Your write is a serious one telling on your emotions. This is a good write! I hope you can go on...take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      This was strong. I liked it alot. I am sorry that this woman seems to be so hateful towards you...i don't know if that is the right word, but i couldn't think of the right one at the moment. But, if you don't want to go through this pain anymore, shouldn't you just let it go...or if you love her, shouldn't you then talk to her, and figure out what or why she does not accept how much you care for her. I don't know if that should help you if you are in this situation...

    Anyways, yea, you misspelled (stabs)...and the line about the angels laughing...that seems extremely out of character for angels in heaven to do, which adds to the anger or what not in the poem. Well, this was good and i hope you to get this situation resolved.
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]


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