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    dots Submission Name: ~*~Hollows~*~dots
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    Author: Static
    ASL Info:    23/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 24/16/6
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dots~*~Hollows~*~dots
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    Deep in the hollows of empty dark

    a heart stays locked and torn apart


    where time is slowly stopped

    and voided numbness fills me up


    deep inside lay twisted thoughts


    that bind me to false hopes


    ravaging my very depth

    and plunges me into hates abyss


    called into empty darkness

    my shallow breathing is slowly halted


    the thoughts of my cold reality will gravely go unaltered




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 17:44:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      another great one...i am truely amazed at how good at writing u are... though it saddens me to think that most good poems are death related...there is more to life than death, i see that now...if u want to talk, i'm here, so, feel free.
    @}-,- HOPE ~rach
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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