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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       There comes a time between girlfreinds when you have to let go when you just know theyh ave found there soulmate


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    Your love paints your face with brilliant color.
    All but purple radiates in your eyes.
    I can feel you heartbeat from across the room.
    The world is different in you now.
    I shows in the gentle touch of your hands.
    A strange new beauty is possessed .
    Your neck seems oddly stronger.
    Able to hold your head up.
    Finally.
    I can give you away totally.




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 20:44:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very true.. having to realize that they have found someone that makes them completely happy is the best and worst feeling.. when its not you..
    good job
    danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      well thats sad...on one hand i understand what your saying i think on the other iam compleatly confused i know you giving someone away but...i could be wrong anyway i like the wording it seemed strong
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I can feel this poem. You have surprised me again. This was so realistic of frindship when one falls in love. You did good as always. Great flow and great depht. Nice work.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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