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    dots Submission Name: SLEEPER TO SLEEPERdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSLEEPER TO SLEEPERdots
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    As darkness comes I see them lying there
    Peaceful and serene
    They seem a perfect pair
    I find myself wanting to send you photographs.
    Your angel dancing in the rain .
    I realize you’d see through them though and recognize the pain
    Its quite in the cemetery
    Its only people sleeping deep
    I know its only silly me with a secret I cant keep
    If there was ever a time you were needed trust it is here
    I know I am alone though
    Wrapped in silence
    Doused in fear .




    Submitted on 2005-08-06 21:10:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like, i like... good poem.. i like thel ast two lines

    "Wrapped in silence
    Doused in fear ."

    i know what its like to sit in the cemetary and just think... then hope... then get depressed...

    good write
    danielle
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it alot i guess more i know the whole depressed thing god i don't really know what to say to it it made me feel sad because...anyway it was good
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I do like the flow, and the imagery is good as well. I suppose I don't have any critisism or anything of the sort, so good write. I hope you do well in life.

    Hopefully,
    Someone's dying hero
    | Posted on 2005-08-06 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful words, they flow like blankets on a cold night. The rythme is good and i love ryhming poem now adays they are few and far between. You are very talented i can not tell you anything that should be adjusted only, I only write to ask if you have written anything else?

    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      You did it again lady! This was so good. You were on right on with everything. I have been pleased with the progress you have made in a short time. I can't find fault here. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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