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    dots Submission Name: Tween Spacedots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 598
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    Description:
       In many traditions of mysticism, magic, and spirituality there are people that are go-betweens. For brief periods of time the step into our world or journey through some other universe. However, to maintain their power and usefulness they must live in some space between them. This position gives them ready access to all that is.

    When they are here, they are completely here. The same is true when they are there. The price they pay for that access is that they must live in the doorway.

    This is not a concept that sets well in our rational minds. In this world it might be considered insane. Although I feel true insanity is the person that lets the real go completely and is lost in that other reality. The person described here is grounded, practical and connected to the real world. Yet within a fraction of a second they slip into that other place. They are always controlling the choice of reality. They key is always knowing the way back. That is why they live in the doorway.

    I am posting this because it is very near me. I also thought you might enjoy letting your mind wrestle with the concept.

    Our minds say it can't be yet to some it is.


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    She stands in the doorway
    as if an earthquake
    is destined to shake her paradigm
    and make her uncertainty certain.

    By choice every piece is complete and separate.
    Her days are night and evenings are dawns.
    Her twilight never passes
    beyond this tween space.

    She lives in the shaman's shadow world,
    in between the past and future.
    It is a slot that is neither real nor unreal.

    She is in the threshold that connects
    life to death, past to present and
    reason to insanity.
    Each is equally her domain.

    She is all and none at once.
    The loneliness of the universe
    occupies the entire space of fulfillment.

    With only one step she'd be in a room,
    not her own or her home.
    So she retreats to this refuge.

    To be something or nothing
    as an act of will is still
    her most prized skill
    and preferred position.




    Submitted on 2005-08-07 11:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I believe this poem has the message of believing in ones one judgement
    In this world a lot of us make the mistake of living there lives based on other peoples words and way of life

    A very Good and powerful message was let out in this write
    Great Job!
    Ron

    Thanks for your comments once again
    I always like hearing from you
    I met a poet who had a published book of poems at the Redondo Reading and she said she would definately talk to some publishers about my writings

    If anything comes of this I swear I would donate a large portion of what I make to a charity dealing with down syndrome children in my sisters name

    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      No this is not so far fetched to me. While insanity might be an escape from reality, it also gives one a chance to know another world exists. As humans we have the ability to see so much less than is available to us.

    by trial and error we learn how to visit and return, maybe it's that reality is a place of comfort and clarity and the other side seems ethereal and unstable. And then, what is there to fear as we can only see what our minds can dream.

    The last stanza has so much truth, an act of will is one of courage and will surely preserve us in any situation. I would like to see more on this idea. Thanks for sharing, this is so hard to describe, I know.
    Nan

    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      ok so I strated reading the poem without reading the description and it confused me and then I read it and so I reread the poem and it makes sense. it's well written and chocked full of imagery, in a way it was very simbolistic and I thought it was about a girl trying to find her way. but I think you did a good job on it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by hidden lady | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting concept and in spiritual terms not that fafetched. String theory predicts at least eleven dimensions in addition to our three of space and one of time.

    This was well written and I became ingrossed in it. I was somewhat dissapointed though, because rather than just a discription I was looking for a story or situation. Perhaps unrealistic given space and time.

    Very fascinating and well written piece!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting piece, loved the concept behind it. Your description led me to believe that there would be more depth to your piece and I was somewhat disappointed that there was not. Still it was a good piece and I'm sure if you had poured a bit more profundity it would have been even more enjoyable. Dont get me wrong I dont mean to insult you I' just giving you my honest opinion.

    - Jermaine
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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