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    dots Submission Name: *bUMPING bODIES*dots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Bytes: 967



    Description:
       bUMPING ur bODY on da dancefloor . . .being admired from a distance then from really up close . . .mmmmmm . . Temperatures rising!!!

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    . . . Temperatures rising
    . . . Sweats driping
    . . . Sounds booming
    . . . Bodies bumping

    loosing my breath- gasping for air
    swaying my hips
    hands in my hair
    while i'm licking my lips

    your penertrating eyes
    piercing at me through the rest
    focused on the movement of my thighs
    devouring the curves of each breast

    tipping your glass politely to say hi
    feeling your hand slipping into my skirt
    trailing down my moist inner thigh
    reading your predictable mind- its filled with dirt!

    . . . Temperatures rising
    . . . Sweats driping
    . . . Sounds booming
    . . . Bodies bumping

    stirring your lips; stirring your hands
    close to my neck; close to my center
    whispering . . . "Lets make plans"
    As warmth encloses your finger








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      Nadia, This was the first of your works that I have read and I must say that I am impressed. I look forward to reading more of your writes. You hit the nail on the head with this write, you even got me thinking of my ex which is not a good thing. (Atleast I got to think about the only thing that really atracted me to her;)
    | Posted on 2006-02-22 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Sexy! I like what you had to say! Kind of made me sweat a little. LOL. I bet the guys are nocking at your door?
    Anyway Thanks for the read it was well writen.
    Kelley
    | Posted on 2006-02-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very descriptive. But not X-rated. Makes a perfect mood for a beautiful thing situation. Makes me miss having a girlfriend. Not for the point of sex, but the feeling of being that close and intimate with someone.
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Afireinside2187 | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha I'm sorry, I totally mis-read what you wrote. I truly appologize for that lol. But still the same about descriptive details n all.

    ~Zach
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Afireinside2187 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was well done but probably meant more for those of a like age. I'm older now but I still can recall experiences much like this. The sensuality you have created is palpable and it certainly made me wish I might be able to maybe have a few hours of that time of life again. No more then a few hours though cause I remember it was a very difficult time too. Nice work, I enjoyed the read alot. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a really hot piece, very stirring. This really captures the party scene and not in a dirty kind of way. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn girl! I want to go to the club with you! wouldn't mind bumping bodies with your cute ass! Why'd you remove the picture? Anyway, that hand up the skirt line got me and just made my counterpart leap! Damn! Warmth enclosing the finger. How about that warmth enclosing something else...Yeah...Wait 'til you see my _______! LOL
    Nice work boo...Keep doing what ya doing or you can start doing me...

    X
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Nadia, you never let me down!

    Great creative writing that drags the reader into the gloom and sexuality of the dance floor, then makes the head whirl as temperatures indeed rise...

    Bloody excellent!

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, very seductive. It really makes the reader and specially me to imagine everything you wrote about and wish to be into your bf's place...lol... well-written piece my dear Nadia.
    remain strong.
    Much Love,
    Khaled.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]


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