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    dots Submission Name: Like You've Just Been Borndots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLike You've Just Been Borndots
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    You might as well be a robot
    because you sit in your cage
    and play with your machines
    while the world's beauty swirls around you,
    and in the event that you escape,
    you drive in your car
    and eat from plastic wrappers.
    I do see the beauty of logic,
    but haven't you felt the earthly joys.
    Come with me, let's lie under the stars,
    and I 'll make you feel
    like you've just been born.






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      This is a great passionate and wisdom laden write. Not that you were keying Goethe, but if you were, I want to say only that he must have never seen a newborn. (yes, I know that's not what you or he meant)
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh.... this I can relate to! I like the phrase "beauty of logic". Well spun message of "stopping to smell the roses on the way" or is it "stopping to admire the daisies"... which is it?
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      great absolutely wonderful, your way with words is so exquisite, another great write!
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write once again cuddledumplin, i loved this one, great imagery!! Keep up the good work, m'lady! ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      we often forget just to live. good poem. I liked the last two lines very much. a great end.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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