Description: Again, another early poem, although I modified this one a lot more than "Clouds". I put it from the perspective of a planet, feeling the sun on it's surface for the first time.
Comment if you like it! :3
PS: Yes, I'm aware that this universe, planets included, are not going to be here forever. However, I didn't know that when I wrote this poem, and I'm going to guess a youngling planet isn't aware of this either. ;)
Normally I like short poems but this was far too short to be sweet. Your pic took up more space than your piece, that's a definate no no. I would have loved to see more feelings and imagery in the poem, hell I would have loved to see more words. Oh well, sorry to knock you I'm really a nice person but this poem just did'nt do it for me.
i agree with "crypt" for the fact that i alwse take it 4 granted. nice, sweat and short. well thats really all i had to say (ya i would think about making your pic a bit smaller):) liam/patrick <3
Submission Name: Sun's Forever
