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Author:	pj5
ASL Info:	37/f/IOWA
Elite Ratio:	4.25 - 40/41/10
Words:	67

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	213
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	412

Description:
Everyone has secrets, some have lots and the more you hide the more of a burden they are to keep hid.

Skeletons dots

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The secret is deep in our soul,
never to be told.
The secret is one we fear,
never for anyone to hear.
The secret is never to unfold,
for fear we might get sold.
What is our secrets we hold tight,
it is our skeletons that we hide.
Skeletons in our closets,
ones that we deposit.
Skeletons back in our minds,
ones we have hid over time.

Submitted on 2005-08-07 22:00:43 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah i got a few of those and they can stay in the closet for now. they arent going anywhere anyhow. i like this it is brief and haunting. come to think of it, it is rather creepy the more i read it over and over like a little chant hahaha maybe that is my own little quirk there. nice one,
mike
| Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
  the skeletons in the closet part. Did u get that from emineim?i really like this one! ya everone hides secrets and it is hard and a burden to keep them inside.Anyway not saying u were copying im just wondering. good job!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the pure simplicity of this. I like the flow as well. I like the way you say we deposit skeletons in our closets. That was very clever. This was very nice.
Maggie
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Good rhyming and emotion, but I think it lacks substance. Your wording is pretty good though...
'What is our secrets we hold tight,
it is our skeletons that we hide.'
Nice metaphore.
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  I find it rather amusing that someone would think that eminem made up the phrase 'skeletons in the closet'
As for the lack of substance, that is all relative. Ambiguity has its charms too. :)
I think you achieved the point of the poem...everyone has secrets!
Good Work!
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
  ooooh i like this i think whats best about it is ur wording and ur use of metophers and i agree with tarwen u got ur point across very well oh almost 4got welcome 2 the site.

~Gena~
| Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  We all have skeletons. Some more than others I guess. This is an interesting topic for a poem. It leaves one thinking of their own secrets and shadows of the past.
I agree with you.. the more you try to hide them.. the more of a burden they become. I'm not saying we should go out and tell everyone..but either deal with them.. or let them go. Holding on to them and allowing them to shadow over us doesn't do us any good.
Take care,
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-08-12 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

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