I Am Happy Because They Are by Brack-Attax

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Author:	Brack-Attax
ASL Info:	21/male/phx
Elite Ratio:	6.53 - 175/116/21
Words:	129

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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Well, many visitations to prison, jail , juvenile hall, and what not. I was on both sides so, here you go. Take it or leave it.

I Am Happy Because They Are dots

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There they are, there they go.
Everybody happy, and in the know.
I sit back and watch the show,
as smiles are formed.
Excitement goosebumps from head to toe.

Everything is going their way,
during business hours and when they play.
Courtesy, and respect are in their thoughts,
and everything they say;
perhaps this will continue in our future days.

They look at me and smile, to silently reconcile.
I do the same, hoping they remember my name.
For, I was always the one to blame.
They still smile at me,
when I am in my shame.

I am happy because they are,
even when I sit behind these bars.
These are my happy scars,
I am happy because they are.

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  I too have been on both side of the bars...and know that you can make a home out of a concrete walled room...even though that sounds kind of bad. You develop a family in there and learn to love all that come across your path. Well...most of them.

This was a unique write and well stated. You didn't bad the position of being in a cell. Yet, we all know...we would rather be outside them walls!

Much love!

li
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  "I am happy because they are" It seems to be just to simple. Many time when we say we are happy we are just putting up a front so the others who are arlready somewhat happy will be even more so.

It seems you lack something that the rest of your pieces posses, but I can't put my finger on it. Maybe I'm just crazy and haven't read your work in awhile.

Anyway, nice job.
Have a good weekend
Kim
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting read...someone imprisoned and relating to the guards who are smiling at him. From outside the bars. While inside the bars you have no choice but to smile back...
I like this-it made me think. Creative and yet simple in it's context. Good work. cher
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the sense of hope you have here, mikey. well maybe not hope but like peace. i really dug the contentment of it all, to be like they meant more to me than ever i do. deep [censored]. hit me up bout the colabo. peace~P
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this is so interesting... wow... when my bro was in jail gaurds didn't smile at him.. he actually got beat up for staring at this one gaurd..but this is good poem i love your last 2 stanzas

They look at me and smile, to silently reconcile.
I do the same, hoping they remember my name.
For, I was always the one to blame.
They still smile at me,
when I am in my shame.

I am happy because they are,
even when I sit behind these bars.
These are my happy scars,
I am happy because they are.

i actually wish it was like this when my bro was in jail...lol... i'll add this to my fav just in case my bro goes back to jail... i can give hime some hope

KAY
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
  i enjoyed this man.. i spent a few in juvie and my bro did a little in jail on some assault charge.. but i understand about the happiness part.. you gotta keep looking for something to keep going, cause there is little happiness there.. its only their when you get with some idiots who i aint got nothing to lose and they make the time go by faster
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a good poem! And it speaks volumes of truth as well! I have never been in prison but I can imagine that certain people can make you life hell in there! I would think that the "they" that you are refering to here are the guards and people of authority. They could certainly make you miserable if they want. I would imagine that you would want to stay on their good side to help stay happy (if you can really be happy in there). Anyway I think you did a nice job with this! Take care!

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Brax, this was a very interesting read. Although, I think I may have got something a little different from it (different from some of the other comments anyway).
I interpreted "they" as the people who come to visit you/him/her in jail (is that right?). But then there were other lines which made me think it was perhaps guards you were referring to. Or perhaps you meant both?
Anyway, I liked this - it was such an interesting and original perspective.

S1: "I sit back and watch the show," - so at peace that this line/stanza highlighted a less obvious path to me.
"Excitement goosebumps from head to toe." - my only question is why? "excitement" seemed to me such a strong reaction that didn't quite marry up with the rest of this stanza. But obviously this is my failure, as others have appeared to get it :)

S2: The two lines painted a background that could have had a number of different reactions, and I was humbled at the reaction you expressed - so understanding when that is in my view the harder road to take (the easier, though not necessarily the right road, being bitterness or anger or frustration). "perhaps this will continue in our future days." - this made me feel a littled awed - I can only hope that I would be as perceptive and empathetic.

S3: "They look at me and smile, to silently reconcile." - this was my fav line! such meaning. In the phrase "to silently reconcile", I could almost see the faces of those people. It is an awesome thing to be able to create such an image in only a few words. :)
"I do the same, hoping they remember my name." - Again, such an amazing capacity for understanding. And then it is returned with:
"They still smile at me,
when I am in my shame."

S4: And then you let us in on the secret, the source/inspiration of this work. :) My only wish is that I had not read your description first so that I could have experienced the full impact of this poem on my first read (instead of getting a heads up).
"These are my happy scars," - a lighter side approach that almost had a trivial feel to it - But of course, we know that is not the case. And because of the context of the rest of the poem, that line actually had a very profound affect.

Very moving piece Brax. I will look for more from you :)
Thanks for the read,
~TD
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by TD | [ Reply to This ]
  This is interesting, and I see how watching the moods of the show of faces going by is very important to your well being.
I like your theme and it makes sense, I'd just like to see something more, the tiniest incident or some slip up that can add color. It's well written on its own, substance, I think is the order of the day. Maybe if you recall something. Did you know when you would be released and kept your eye on that day?
Thanks for sharing, Brax,
peace and love,
Nan
| Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]

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