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Author:	MurphyGirl44
Elite Ratio:	3.69 - 70/76/25
Words:	268

Class/Type:	Rant/Alone
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You make me feel so guilty, call me dammit, make the effort, for once in your life you should make an effort
Its so hard for me to see you, I try I really do,
I have such a busy life now,
Have you even noticed? Have you seen what I have done with my life? Are you even proud?
Don't turn your back on me, for I have never turned my back on you, don't make me feel so cold and forgotten!
I was there to catch your tears, I was there!
I went with you every Sunday to watch someone not only you loved but someone I loved die
I was the only one who helped you when everyone hurt you and pushed you out of their lives
Did I not sit there night after night as you swallowed alcohol like it was air?
You said things that hurt me badly, I still stuck with you! I didn't have to but I did
I'm all you have left, and you leave me here to cry alone, but I've always cried alone...
They say I'm spoiled because I spend so much time with you, once a month is hardly enough!
They don't know how much hurt my heart has soaked up, all the hurt that they caused you, all the hurt you caused them, I carry in my heart!
But now daddy you leave me hear to cry alone, and all I need from you is for you to say you love me, but I haven't heard those words in such a long time...

Submitted on 2005-08-08 02:08:24 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I wouldnt really refer to this a poetry but it is a good piece. The emotions are clear and it's good that you don't reveal the person who you are referring to until the end. Yeah, I don't see this as poetry, it was too close to a ramble to be poetry but I'm not saying it's not good because it is.
Laura-Grace
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  Awwww...how sad. Nice rant though...very in your face stuff. I was just listening to Linkin Parks "Faint" when reading this, it just made the rage and rant all that more evident and powerful. Yeah, sometimes you just gotta let it all out, ya know? Good job for that. Have a good one and keep smilin'
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I was on the verge of tears when i read it its soo sad( to tell the truth(no lie) im goig through the same things (not with my dad but with some people in my life)) But look you'll sethat thers something there alwas. I really liked the part about the alcohol cus i've seen people expierence so much of this.
I fell for ya
liam/patrick <3
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very emotional plea for personhood; the need to be recognized and appreciated as a person, as a daughter and as a friend. The fact is, though,it isn't really poetry, it's a short essay/testimonial. The double agony of being abandoned by a blood relative in the midst of loss is very clearly expressed; I'm under the impression that the 'father' was never liked or accepted by members of his wife's family, and the drinking is either the cause or result of the rejection. I could be wrong. In either case, this was well written.
| Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  :(This piece does make me feel very sad.When i started reading it , i actually thought you were writing about someone special who was close to you .I was surprised to get the msg toward the end that it is for your father that you 'cry alone'.
This piece would make anyone emotional...nice write.
| Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]

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