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    dots Submission Name: Passionate Kissesdots
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    Author: lmz
    ASL Info:    40/female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3433/1529/84
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Memories of our encounter
    Dance through my mind
    One evening spent together
    Best of all time

    Simple, yet perfect
    Sensual in every way
    Your arms wrapped my body
    And entwined, we did stay

    Touched the skin upon my face
    Slowly leaned in towards me
    Captivated within your eyes
    Anticipated possibilities

    Your lips soft, most inviting
    Pressed firmly against mine
    A warm, tender sensation
    Sweet tasting, just so fine

    Softly spoken romantic words
    Intimate loving embrace
    Intense desire pure and strong
    Sexy smooches all over my face

    Night became morning
    As we sat and kissed
    Sharing such an incredible experience
    There was nothing that I missed

    Time together passed quickly
    Filled with lustful wishes
    Yet completely fulfilled and satisfied
    With an evening of passionate kisses




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      Hehehehe... I liked this. I could feel the heated passion as I read this. You described an intimate scene between two lovers very well, but then again how would I know that...lol.
    As usual your picture blamed with the write excellently. Keep up the great work and have a blessed and wonderful day.


    This was my favourite stanza.

    Time together passed quickly
    Filled with lustful wishes
    Yet completely fulfilled and satisfied
    With an evening of passionate kisses

    Hehe... naughty...lol
    God bless.
    | Posted on 2006-04-20 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sexy! haha. Yes, the poem has a feel of an "old love", one where the characters know everything about each other, but still never run out of things to say... They seem to be eachothers best friend. At the beginning, the "one night" made me think it may be a one night stand, but when I finished the poem, it seemed to me more that the characters have been in love a while.
    I liked it alot!
    -Ann
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      very focused and to the point, characteristic of an adult. it was a good poem overall, read smooth and punctuated neatly. makes me want to spend a night just passionately kissing my girl, (oh wait i already do that) lol.
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by trent | [ Reply to This ]
      wooooooooooooooooooow!
    I do not have something to say about that wonderful and well-written piece of art because my fellow writers have said everything that your poem deserves. I really like that poem and liked specially that part:
    " Touched the skin upon my face
    Slowly leaned in towards me
    Captivated within your eyes
    Anticipated possibilities

    Your lips soft, most inviting
    Pressed firmly against mine
    A warm, tender sensation
    Sweet tasting, just so fine."

    That is awesome and I'm going to add that poem to my favourites... This poem moving my mind and I'm dreaming to have such night... lol.
    Good Job.
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so sweet... i think the only thing i didn't like about it was the word smooch... i thought it was veri sexi and romantic up to there... theres something about the word smooch that sounds... hmm im not sure, maybe it's all in my head, other than that i really liked it... and im glad to see that there was no shock ending where it was a solo thing or anything. hehe. lived it like it love it. once again ur a great writer, i like how u write differently... im only just getting out of the habbit of structuring all of my poems a little differently and it's really hard. so my compliments to u. awsome!
    p.s thanx for bringing back some good kissing memories.

    xox jen
    | Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by thoughts | [ Reply to This ]
      hrm... can i have some passionate kisses? man, i love the write and how it kept me from drifting at any point. your writing is very good. heh. Gw.

    Candale-Switch
    | Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by Candale-Switch | [ Reply to This ]
      Yay little kisses! Love em! SNUGGLES! Lol.

    This is so sweet. I love the last line, because it shows that you DON’T have to have sex to have a fulfilling night. The best nights I have ever had I havn’t had sex. It is just like you say, ‘fulfilling’

    ‘Time together passed quickly
    Filled with lustful wishes
    Yet completely fulfilled and satisfied
    With an evening of passionate kisses’

    I love what you say here, I love how you say it and I love the rhyme. It is a very gentle rhyme, very pure, which goes with the writing and subject.

    The only thing I would change is the use of ‘filled’ and ‘fulfilled’. If you could replace either of these I think it would read better than having ‘fill’ twice.

    Ops one other thing, first stanza, second line ‘Dance’. Just thought it was an obvious word, dare I say it! Lol. Maybe ‘waltzed through my mind’ or ‘enchant my mind’.

    But other than these minor things, lovely write, lovely read and lovely sentiment!
    | Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by PaulHudson | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah .. it was very good.. maybe adding some strong words .. it would be better .. but like this it sounds perfect becuas eirt is very sweet it cught my attention from the begining . so it is very good i think ...
    like many that has com,mented here i love this sentences:

    "Your lips soft, most inviting
    Pressed firmly against mine
    A warm, tender sensation
    Sweet tasting, just so fine"

    i felt tha t yesterday when i kissed my girlfriend she is so sweet i just dopnt deserve her ...
    keep on writing and why dont you check my writing ..
    peace and love
    victor!
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Lorna,
    I think this poem has been kissed by Lorna's talent and is as sweet a passionate as any I have read. Love poem are my favorite to read and this one is really good. I see where it needs no changes and I enjoyed reading it.
    Thanks for sharing your talent...
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Another little gem from your hand. Well structured, the rhyme complimented the content. The intimacy of the piece was such that it never deviated much from the central theme, not of sex, but pure togetherness via the passionate kisses. Very effective and very very good.

    Passionate kisses stand alone in the erotic stakes and you have recognised this and exploited this to the full.
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Great rhyme scheme, great flow through the story of the kiss. I love how this doesnt get boring at any point, i wanted to keep reading and finish it. Good write, great read.

    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      This one I really like Lorna
    I take it as almost a thank you dance to the Lord above for not only bringing you the beauty of nature but also someone to share it with

    Very Touching and Beautiful

    Take Care
    Ron


    Your recent comments touched me Lorna more then ever
    I thank you
    And God Bless You and your Family

    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You describe perfectly the warmth that is derived from a couple engaged in osculation that doesn't result in sexual intercourse. You aspire to make the point that love is not sex and sex is not love.

    For me the second and fourth lines of the fourth stanza are examples of a 'non-forced' perfect rhyme

    Your lips soft, most inviting
    Pressed firmly against mine
    A warm, tender sensation
    Sweet tasting, just so fine

    Nice work! Nightrider
    | Posted on 2005-10-13 00:00:00 | by Nightrider | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice soft themed poem and it intrigued me at points... nice way of keeping it available to younger audiences by not letting it get to anymore than kisses and hugs and holding and cuddling... It was pretty good just like all your other work... Thanks for this and Keep writting
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a dedicated poem, so it is waivered against any nay saying in my book of rules. Its definitely a liberated write! I can always appreciate that. The point of writing a poem is to make the reader smile. If this was written for one, wow, what a lucky guy. And if this is written for all of us...well then you are very generous!

    My favorite stanza
    Touched the skin upon my face
    Slowly leaned in towards me
    Captivated within your eyes
    Anticipated the possibilities

    Because I understand EXACTLY what you mean.


    -Shoes
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by iShoes | [ Reply to This ]
      so romantic,reminds me of a girl i used to go out with and we would literally do nothing but kiss for hours and hours. Passion doesnt necessarily have to be about making love and this portrays that beautifully.
    graham
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      I beleve some here are looking for Sexual instead of passion which can be quiet and very peresonal. As a bit of a romantic, I know that soft and easy makes as much contact with the heart as any rough and routy tell it all so there is no imagination left.
    I believe you have done quite well with this subject.
    No 'but's' for me unless I get real lucky in another venture, your verses are very touching.
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is good...but...yeah there is a but lol. I think you should go more indept. I mean passionate kisses is the subject. It doesn't seem so passionate to me. Other than that overall the poem is great. I mean you have something good giong here.

    Mikki
    x3
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      magnificent Lorna almost every stanza is passion in itself. I love the entire 4th stanza
    "Sexy smooches all over my face" that is so adorable. i have to copy and paste the complete
    7th stanza a whole night of kissing was enough didnt have to go any further that is mind boggling. "Time together passed so quickly
    And filled with lustful wishes Yet completely fulfilled and satisfied With an evening of passionate kisses" love it Lorna steamy and innocent at the same time, very good, mike
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      How could I resist checking out a poem with a title such as "Passionate Kisses"!
    Sheesh, I wish this evening was mine and not yours :)

    A couple of minor points - take them or leave them - I won't be offended :)

    * The rhyme in a couple of places felt a bit forced. eg, S2 "way" and "stay"; S4 "mine" and "fine". Perhaps, a bit of exploration on this might help - just a thought.

    * Very minor point - S4, L1 - an extra space to be deleted.

    * S4, L4: This is such lustful, sensual poem, but this line felt a bit flat to me. I think it might have been the rhyme with "fine" that did it for me. anyway, just putting it out there :)

    * "Sexy smooches all over my face" - this was my fav line! It is so simple, so direct and I loved it! It really worked.

    * I also really liked the last stanza and the last line. It was an effective ending.

    This was a really hot write! Sweet dreams for me now.
    Cheers,
    ~TD
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by TD | [ Reply to This ]
      :) lmz, What a beautiful composure you have created here that grabs and maintains your readers all the way through with the last stanza speaking volumes. Yes, during the beautiful moments of passion we hope they last forever but rather seem to rush by so quickly. Once again, your talent is glowing and I want to Thank You for sharing this with us all. You are awesome as you gain more readers. Your Friend, MickPigKnuckles :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by MickPigKnuckles | [ Reply to This ]
      Lorna, I absolutely love it! You capture the essence of passion so perfectly when you write about it. It's so sensual and sexy! There definately isn't anything better than those quiet tender moments being in someone's arms and just kissing and looking into their eyes. This is completely romantic and another great write!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      hello Lorna
    AAhhh the passion of a kiss , i remeber it well , now this i miss , makes me feel lonely again , will have too find first bloke that passes me door then again maybe not he don't owe his teeth lol.
    Fantastic , passionate , romantic piece Lorna , only you can make them this good .
    take care
    Elaine x
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Lorna! This made me want to go snatch my bf from reading and make out like crazy. lol. You are right those kisses are the best sometimes. I like the way you made it sensual and romantic at once. Great job Lorna!
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Now this is a nice write. It is a fact, kisses are a most important and delectable part of getting intimate with someone. A good kiss is worth the moon. I have no problem at all imagining a night spent kissing... over and over again.
    I have to admit though, it would be difficult for me to stop at kissing if it was THAT good...lol.
    That 2nd line in your 2nd stanza describes this entire poem - "Sensual in every way".

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. most of the poetry i read on here is all daark and sad. so this was a nice change. you are so totally right about the kiss.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. most of the poetry i read on here is all daark and sad. so this was a nice change. you are so totally right about the kiss.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. most of the poetry i read on here is all daark and sad. so this was a nice change. you are so totally right about the kiss.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. most of the poetry i read on here is all daark and sad. so this was a nice change. you are so totally right about the kiss.
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey you! And you thought kiss2 was sexy!

    Wow, this was so romantic and sexy without being explicit. As I read along I could feel the passion so sweet and so urgent. It was easy to put one's self in the poem. For me, I was smooching all over your face. It was so delicious! I liked the last Stanza;

    Time together passed so quickly
    And filled with lustful wishes
    Yet completely fulfilled and satisfied
    With an evening of passionate kisses

    Wonderful Write! :) BTW how do you do those smileys?

    I aqree Kissing is my favorite thing!
    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      i cant wait to have a feeling that you possess in this piece-so much passion describing one and many thing. i would wait another ten years just to experience the romance you feel. too bad i am only eighteen to young to experience yet not to young to dream of it. yeah you are probably thinking no bodys too young. but i grew mostly around my father who naively believed that eighteen to twenty five is far too young to be so in love. so that s when ill think about actually experiencing such things. perferablly ill wait until after i get my MD title...cant wait for that. anyways bravo write...so much feeling put into one thing. good one

    later days
    tracey
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
      oh yes, I can relate, and feel lthe movement and anticipation are most enjoyable, as kissing is so very telling of who we are.
    One can interpret if the other is listening and find the equa=force of no resistance, perhaps I should write my own
    expose' on kissing. I believe your thoughts have inspired me! I like how you let our imaginations wander on their own...

    zero gravity marked by effortless realms of pleasure.
    Thanks for the adventure, I had a great time.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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