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    dots Submission Name: Power Of Lovedots
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    Author: Podenco del infierno
    ASL Info:    19/M/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 205/195/38
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This topic in this is suicide, and for that reason i hesitate to post this. It is not a well accepted or respected topic in the world of poetry today...or at least so it seems. So i ask of you to say what you must, Just know that this is only an idea i came up with and i am fine, so don't try to preach or anything. Anyways, i hope you enjoy this as well as you possibly can.


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    dotsPower Of Lovedots
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    The room is dark.
    I sit on the edge of my bed,
    Strike a match.
    Light a candle.
    The knife before me,
    In my hand.
    Anger in my blood.
    I cry,
    nd as the tears start to pour,
    The blade kisses my wrist.
    Over and over again.
    Slashing.
    I scream!
    Crying out!
    The anger overpowers me...
    Carving deeper,
    Searching for the vein.
    Tears pouring!
    As my blood stains its lips.
    One more kiss!
    I scream again!
    Silence...
    My breath is lost,
    I am tired.
    The candle light retreats,
    And in the darkness,
    Her face appears.
    My weeping eyes look at her.
    And I realize,
    I love her too much.
    I can not leave.
    I fall asleep forever scarred.
    Reminded every day,
    That love is stronger than death.




    Submitted on 2005-08-08 09:35:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, the imagery in this poem is great, as well as the final message. Yes love is more powerful than death and life. Great poem. Tim
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by Tim8806 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that is really powerful. I think that the best thing about this piece, because I've tried to write about suicide before, even though I'm not suicidal, but I think for most people it's very hard to do. To try and put yourself into that mindset, to write, but not let it carry on into everyday life. And so I think that you are quite a talented writer to be able to provoke these sorts of feelings, and hope that you continue.
    Regards, Kalinda
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a powerful write! Very intense all the way through and I am glad to read in the description that you are well and this is merely a writing! That makes this very clever and insightful! I can feel the intensity of this growing more and more as I continue to read. Providing me with realistic visuals of what is happening which means you have written this very well and with good description! Then as you see her face, you realize what you have done, and that you cant continue. I personally wouldnt have started but anyway...love is stronger than death at least in this case! Great descriptive intense write! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, nathan...

    well, in the end you come to the realization that love is more powerful than death... have seen that evidenced many times, so i do not doubt it at all. it just makes me wish that you had seen her face sooner, so that you would have never started, but things don't always work like that. you're right, suicide and cutting aren't very accepted in poetry or society and (forgive me for saying this, i'm not trying to sound preachy) but there seems to be an epidemic of ignorance going on... people who are so heartless to those that cut or contemplate suicide, those are the ones that drive them to do those things, you know? instead of trying to help find a solution, they only add to the problem, forcing the victim into a downward spiral that inevitably ends up in death.

    makes you think, doesn't it? why are so many people so vehemently opposed to cutting and suicide, and so against trying to help the victims? (sigh) well, enough of that. just one last comment. love... in the end, triumphs over everything... ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]


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