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    dots Submission Name: The Color of Stilldots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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       Just driving out in the country and came upon this pond that although stagnate, was like a painting with the pollen and green stuff on the surface ~ it looked just like someone took a big brush and brushed it on the still surface. The birds would dip in there and barely disturb it. Beautiful!!!

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    dotsThe Color of Stilldots

    Be still

    Let Nature
    Paint Your Surface
    Yellow ~

    Let the
    Dip and Dive
    in Your Waters ~ ~ ~

    Shine Upon
    Us Glorious Son
    A Reflection
    Deep waters...still *~*

    Submitted on 2005-08-08 14:30:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem a lot...I like its format...I love that you took something like a pond and were inspired to write about it...
    very good job with this poem...I look foreward to reading more soon...

    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      great write and very enjoyable read
    thanx for yor comments
    look forward to reading more of yor posts
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see you at a poetry cafe with this one. Someone beating on the drum in the background. This was quite relaxing. I really liked the imagery that you got across here. I felt tranquility. Good job.

    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Xtremebiter | [ Reply to This ]
      i can picture myself there with you watching the birds and the stillness of the water i loved the imagery. very relaxing peaceful
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, really beautiful.
    I almost felt as if i was really close to nature away from the tensions of everyday Life.
    The unique thing about this poem is its structure.Haven't come across something like this before.
    Almost as if someone is commanding nature to do all of that , than it actually happening by itself
    Be Still
    The first two lines are very captivating.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece. You really put the reader in the moment with you. I especially like the way you described the birds. Nothng I'd change; terrific work.


    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful poem that helps you reflect on the wonders God has made. It sounds so serene as you read this poem. Great flow and imagery. I love this poem. Great job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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