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    dots Submission Name: The Devil Within......dots
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    Author: pj5
    ASL Info:    37/f/IOWA
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 40/41/10
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       I meet many people who have different religions and that is great. Because no matter who or what you believe is your GOD, it is just a powerful thing to believe and not be lost like others I know. BLESS you all. Smiles...


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    dotsThe Devil Within......dots
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    The devil within,
    is our every sin.
    The devil within is ones toll,
    he wants your soul.
    The devil within takes his time,
    he does not listen to the LORDS chimes.
    The devil within plays many tricks,
    he has many he wants to pick.
    The devil within will capture you,
    if you don't seek the prayer true.
    The devil within will make his case,
    and seek havok upon this place.
    The devil within we must fight back,
    we must stay on the right track.
    The devil within is always there,
    we must always fight this fear.
    The devil within is pushed back to hell,
    because we choose to listen to GODS bells.


    by pj5





    Submitted on 2005-08-08 19:23:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahh the devil within. that seems like a personal "devil" a human being's dark alter ego cause the real devil is probably on some island ordering a martini laughing his butt off j/k. this reads nice and provokes thoughts. im a lost spirit myself caught between the old man (upstairs) and the other guy (downstairs) im the lukewarm cant pick a side guy {hello!} *waves* and it suits me fine. im good when i need to be and not-so-good when the time calls for it. nice write though. it got me thinking and that is always a good thing,
    mike
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. I liked the rhyme shceme used. I also think your flow was nice. I am not a religious person, but I appreciate your message. This was well written. Nice job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      There are times we all listen to the devil's voice, that whisper on your left shoulder that talks you into doing what you know or feel is wrong.
    I really like the last part.. kick the devil back to hell and listen more to God..
    This leaves the reader with something to think about.. choices we make in life.. right or wrong decisions.. etc.

    Keep writing.. keep believing..
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]



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