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    Author: pj5
    ASL Info:    37/f/IOWA
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 40/41/10
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 198
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 720



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       A way of feelings long waited to express.....
    20 years of marriage and I still feel this love.Smiles...


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    Passion stired and love embraced,
    your eyes, your lips, your touch like lace.
    I hear your words all bliss and sad,
    good times and bad times that we once had.
    Your vision rides my every dream,
    I can touch and feel you - so it seems.
    To want you here sets my desire,
    You warm my soul and lift me higher.
    Since you left me alone,
    I sit and wonder when you'll be home.
    To kiss and love you through the night,
    To hold you in my arms at night.
    They say that roses bloom in red,
    and violets in blue.
    With honest thoughts and truthful words,
    I really do love you!!


    by pj5




    Submitted on 2005-08-08 19:29:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it it's really sweet and speaks truth.The ryhme scheme skips a bit at the end and I would fix:
    "To kiss and love you through the night,
    To hold you in my arms at night."

    Maybe to something like:
    "To kiss an love you through the night,
    To hold you in my arms just right."

    I dunno its yours do what you want.But I liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was so great. I'm in a good relationship, and this made me more grateful for what I have. This was heartfelt and emotional, truly a pleasure to read. This was very good.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so romantic! congratulations on 20 years of marriage. that's hard to do these days. you are blessed to have him and him you.
    i love your outlook in this poem!
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      What a wonderful delight to read about a love that's still strong after 20 years.
    My first impression was... "ah, how sweet". It gives us all hope that love can stand strong.. even over a vast amount of time.
    I hope you have another 20 (and beyond) to share in this love you two have together.
    An enjoyable read.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]



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