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    dots Submission Name: A Hooker For The Worlddots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 907
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       ahhhhhhh -yeah suck on this for a while world!

    I would love to buy the world a hooker
    so that we could all live in peace and harmony


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    dotsA Hooker For The Worlddots
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    It can brighten your day.
    Make you stop and smell the flowers,
    and contemplate the powers that be,
    and why they often look the other way.
    You see something old and only see new.
    You are beside yourself.
    Yet you couldn’t be more you.
    Feelings of hope and clarity.
    Your eyes begin to wander.
    And I wonder what you want with me.
    Right there and then is when....
    the heart beats in anticipation.
    The look on my face.
    Your smell, how do I taste?
    Afterwards with a look that says I'm content.
    Spreading cheer everywhere but then away it went.
    I kind of hoped that the feeling would stay.
    Yeah.......I'm smiling
    I just got laid!

    I'd like to buy the World a hooker.
    We might find Peace and Harmony
    a-hell-u-va-lot sooner



    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2005-08-08 22:31:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok... I dunno what u had in mind when u related this to the world. But u have a typo. Look of content should be look of contempt to go with the rhyme, but if u meant about satisfaction it should be contentment, which I suppose might create a slight problem to the rhythm. I am sure u will find a way to fix if it is the meaning u want.

    I think in way u want the world to get so everyone would be happy. I wrote something in somehow the same idea in mind but about the extremists who think they can blow the world. But I did not post, for friends of mine told me it would be too offensive.

    Unlike ur poem here, because it is a bit of a wish of happiness to the world, the same u had after getting laid. And for some reason u want the world to feel the same, my idea is that it is cos u think that happy ppl do not make wars.

    So back to the 60s aren't we? "Make love not war"

    Cute poem made me smile

    Congrats ;)

    Viv
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      Look of contentment is what you'd want here bro.

    or "a contented look" would also be correct.

    BUT as it is, I'd have to side with that sexy sister from across the sea!
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      Here we go again LT. Now who but you would ever think of buying the world a hooker?
    I really liked this poem. Sex does seem to make people very happy, and happy people don't destroy the world.

    We have mean people out there who you can tell haven't been laid in a long time. If they had they wouldn't be pricks like they are.

    Anyway, sex does bring me contentment and give me that dreamy feeling like everything is perfect. Its even better with someone you love.

    Good piece and a little bit of a change from what you have written lately.

    Brightest Blessings,
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece put a grin on my face. The imagery was good, and the point conveyed was humerus but had a slight vibe of a serious undertone. Hookers, they're everywhere.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha LMT! get the world a hooker.. so whats the world then, male or female? ;)

    nah, this is a fantastic concept, very clever.. describing how one persons simple happiness with a hooker could become an analogy for ending world doom...

    what I think this poem is lamenting in a way is simplicity. Like get the simple man a hooker, he'll be happy. It'll be enough.

    get the world a hooker...all the while knowing that it would never be enough.

    well I tend to make no sense so forgive me.

    very very eerie poem despite the happy go lucky sort of language.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, I so needed this todady. Definately, if we all got laid, we would all be in a much better mood. Just stay away from the nuclear weapons man, it could blow something off.

    ~Jessica
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      At first I didnt know what to think about this poem...it is quite different. But I read it over again, and I must say that ...well, I simply LOVE IT.

    I love how it talks about how you look at the world in a different light after you have gotten laid. It is really awesome. It is true..that is what I like about this poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      Aah, so Bush just needs to get laid! Well hell, somebody get Laura on the damn job! lol
    As much as this is a good giggle, I enjoy the deeper meaning to it as well. Okay, for me there was a deeper meaning, I don't know if you intended it or not. lol
    Great write,
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Buy the world a hooker? Hmmmmm...she'll probably take your money and run! LOL...by the time she leaves China she won't have any walls left...get it? LMFAO

    Okay...lame joke I know! LOL

    THis was...different...but, a fun read!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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