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For once you love and your soul is taken your heart ripped out broke and beaten the pain and sorrow the agony of defeat you did your best you begin to no longer eat your skin grabs at your bones as a glove forced to fit you grow tired and weary your bones show at the hip your eyes begin to wrinkle but you are not old of age you use pills to alleviate the pain and to fight away the rage you desecrate the lord these emotions you cant contain he ruined your life with no willing to explain a cliché you may think but isn't it all the same for a love for one so strong the words are all the same |
yeah i like this one a lot and i agree with Imz a lot on this would, you try so hard to just get out what you are feeling and then someone comes along and takes a sh!t on it by calling it a cliché, every time someone does that to me i just tell that that it was ment to be that way. ~liz~ | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ] | Very descriptive work and good use of emotion. I especially like the line "Your skin grabs at your bones" - what a visualization in the mind! It reminds me of the new song by Cold Play, called Fix You. The lines "And lights will guide you home, and ignite your bones..." gives me goosebumps... Excellent write in my opinion | cher | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ] | HA! Very nicely stated this is! I agree with this! It sucks when you hurt and pour your honest emotions into a writing and someone tells you it is cliché! What you have said here is so true! What you feel is what you feel and lots of the time it is the same as what others feel. That should not take away from the fact that you feel these feelings and express them into writings. Reading this gave me a smile even though it is sad and results from painful writings being unfairly judged, I like how you direct this towards those who leave those types of comments and they could open their eyes a bit and see reality! Great job with this! Take care! | Lorna ![]() | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ] | |