yeah i like this one a lot and i agree with Imz a lot on this would, you try so hard to just get out what you are feeling and then someone comes along and takes a sh!t on it by calling it a cliché, every time someone does that to me i just tell that that it was ment to be that way.
Very descriptive work and good use of emotion. I especially like the line "Your skin grabs at your bones" - what a visualization in the mind! It reminds me of the new song by Cold Play, called Fix You. The lines "And lights will guide you home, and ignite your bones..." gives me goosebumps... Excellent write in my opinion cher
HA! Very nicely stated this is! I agree with this! It sucks when you hurt and pour your honest emotions into a writing and someone tells you it is cliché! What you have said here is so true! What you feel is what you feel and lots of the time it is the same as what others feel. That should not take away from the fact that you feel these feelings and express them into writings. Reading this gave me a smile even though it is sad and results from painful writings being unfairly judged, I like how you direct this towards those who leave those types of comments and they could open their eyes a bit and see reality! Great job with this! Take care!